POVs
Added 2023-12-14 15:02:13 +0000 UTCHow did you feel about the switching POVs in chapter 22? Do you want to see more of that, or would you have preferred all of Arthur and Kelly in one chapter and the girls' night out in the next?
Choose your preference below:
Comments
I’m ok with the switching back and forth when the story is following timeline and the separate threads will merge together, as in chapter 22. I also liked how you continued that in chapter 23 finishing out each of the story lines.
Doug Erickson
2024-01-25 01:17:03 +0000 UTCIt really depends. During this section where things are happening it requires switching back and forth. Now if you wanted one chapter of Kelly and Arthur flirting and about to bone the next the girls at the bar to the accident then Arthur answering the phone call. If u think the current pacing is correct then this. However think about your audience. There is almost no sexy time in the last chapter just build up.
Joseph Snyder
2023-12-16 18:15:00 +0000 UTC
