Danmachi - Demeter Familia Premise Chapter 1
Added 2022-11-01 21:30:28 +0000 UTCHello friends and fans, Kairomaru is br
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Awesome, really looking forward to what gets used and how it’s implemented. 😁👍
Christian Jeffress
2023-10-01 21:51:38 +0000 UTCGlad that you liked it! Ideas for his Magic have been taken from Killua, Zenitsu, and a few other Lightning Users in other Animes.
Kairomaru
2023-10-01 21:22:51 +0000 UTCThis seems wildly, entertaining already, and I’m excited to read the newly released second chapter. Absolutely love, his lightning, enhanced, super speed, as it makes me think of Kiilua and his Godspeed. It will definitely be very cool if he eventually goes around, throwing lightning bolt as well, so whenever I think of lightning, I also think of some railgun like ability. Another weapon that could suit him very well is a one-handed medieval style war-hammer. Not the supermassive ones you see in media a lot, but the more realistic, smaller sized ones that you find in history. A really cool looking one can be found on YouTube from the channel That Works, the video Forging a [War Hammer] - 1st Historical Build. His speed would allow him to do a massive amount of damage with the hammer side of the weapon, and pierce some pretty strong armor and bone with the spiked side. Anyway, thanks for a great chapter.
Christian Jeffress
2023-10-01 21:15:14 +0000 UTCHades once crossed my mind, but the idea didn't really come together. But being a Hero is part of what makes Bell...well, Bell. Changing that gets you an 'INO' story. INO stands for 'In Name Only' it refers to changing a character so much from the source material that the only reason they're still considered the same character is due to having the same name. I try not to do that too much if I can help it.
Kairomaru
2022-11-13 06:37:11 +0000 UTCI like the Inari story because it’s a new god, I like hephastus story also because I think she deserves happiness that bell can provide. You ever think of doing a Hades one where bell is more of a mature badass but still kind? Maybe he could be more like a killer of monsters vs hero for others?
Michael Turner
2022-11-13 06:33:27 +0000 UTCGlad you liked it! I hope you enjoy the Hephaestus Familia Premise and the Inari Familia Premise too!
Kairomaru
2022-11-11 03:20:33 +0000 UTCThis was great keep it up
jonathon
2022-11-11 03:13:32 +0000 UTCSorry for my tardiness—I’m not sure how I missed the launch. I like this story the best of the three premisses. I’ll wait for a Loki Familia candidate before making a final statement. I mean, they’re all really good, and I’d be happy to read any of them should they get picked up by the network.
Mad Hatter
2022-11-10 04:55:21 +0000 UTCMe: “Bzunny!” I’m jumping in here, I know, and I’m late, so that’s two strikes against me, but I fully endorse a Trickster Loki based story. Prolly not so much evil, but more like smartest person in the room Loki.
Mad Hatter
2022-11-10 04:42:17 +0000 UTCI'm happy that you've enjoyed all of them, so far!
Kairomaru
2022-11-04 14:54:28 +0000 UTCOh no, all of these premises are really good. Soooo how about writing four danmachi fics at once eh? Thanks for the reads
Kyllix
2022-11-04 14:40:00 +0000 UTCI mean I like bestia as much as the next guy (cause tig ol bitties shortstack=win) however if I was in orio bells place and with any idea what that world is really like, I'd probably try and get in hephs, lokis or demeters fam
Wanous
2022-11-04 01:30:40 +0000 UTCMaybe once I finish another fic, then I'd have the time necessary to expand on one of these premises.
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 16:25:42 +0000 UTCOnce I finish another fic, we'll see about making any of these into actual stories of their own.
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 16:24:54 +0000 UTCSome of the pilot chapters are over 10K words already! Cut me a little slack, my friend! Pilot chapters are meant to set up the story, not have the entire Premise play out.
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 16:24:01 +0000 UTCWow, another DanMachi story. Got to admit you're really into them right now, not that I'm complaining at all. I really hope you right more of this, it seems like it would be an interesting premise, Bell the Lighting Swordsman.
The_Slave_Knight
2022-11-02 10:48:52 +0000 UTCAll these premises are good and all but I’m really hoping they get additional chapters if they all end up one shots I’m gonna be very sad
KaddyD
2022-11-02 10:01:43 +0000 UTCIt would be great if it were so since I look a lot and the danmachi fandom is very underdeveloped (or at least I can not find good fics) and incidentally if it serves to vent the captive muse also helps
sebastian contreras acuña
2022-11-02 09:29:03 +0000 UTCOk I adore all of these premise stories, I just wish you’d extend them a little bit so we could see the reaction of a goddess who has actual experience dealing with Liara Frisse (sorry for butchering the spelling on that, it’s 5 am for me so I’m not the best at spelling/thinking right now )
Dan Lemongton
2022-11-02 09:05:45 +0000 UTCThank you! I appreciate it! Glad you've enjoyed the changes so far! A few of the Harem have already been met!
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 06:18:47 +0000 UTCGreat job as usual. Absolutely love the story and the way you are taking it. And you kept Bell innocent enough but reduced his density to a reasonable degree. Definitely good change to Canon. Wonder who you chose for the harem.
Pheonix774
2022-11-02 06:13:31 +0000 UTCBut after the training **and during it when he's unconscious** there will be Lap Pillows! Yay! lol
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:59:44 +0000 UTCHis Defense and Dexterity will definitely be power-leveled by the women claiming him.
K. W.
2022-11-02 02:57:42 +0000 UTCLoki: "Bnuuy!"
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:54:39 +0000 UTCDon’t think I remember mage Loki. I have the doc for ice element so that’s the one I was talking about. Where he finds her walking home drunk. “Mah bnnuy!”
Kaminoryu
2022-11-02 02:53:18 +0000 UTCGlad you liked the changes. His power isn't Speed. It's Lightning, so there won't be any Flash powers. Not the biggest fan of Western Comics myself.
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:53:05 +0000 UTCNot bad. You've reduced Bell's density to a palatable level. Any plans to crib more abilities from The World's Fastest Man? Perhaps vibrating certain body parts quickly?
K. W.
2022-11-02 02:50:10 +0000 UTCOi! I demand you look forward to STRONK Bell too! lol Ice Element Loki or Mage Loki? I have two for that Familia because reasons.
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:48:34 +0000 UTCWhile I am looking forward to the Loki one, ambivalent on Ganesha, I’d rather see one of the others get a second chapter. Though I wouldn’t say no to that DxD premise. *wink wink nudge nudge*
Kaminoryu
2022-11-02 02:45:33 +0000 UTCMagic and Agility in this one for sure.
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:44:04 +0000 UTCWhat about Loki or Ganesha? I got Premises for DAYS! Kek!
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:42:24 +0000 UTCInari or Demeter. Liked the Hephaestus one too but not as much as the other two. Though I wouldn’t say no to another Journey to Hero chapter either.
Kaminoryu
2022-11-02 02:38:28 +0000 UTCHey, Hestia in Kai's fics is not annoying. Only canon Hestia is.
Tristan McKenzie O'Meara
2022-11-02 02:38:18 +0000 UTCLike Kai said, Godspeed mixed with Thunder Breathing. Therefore, I have dubbed it Thunder Speed.
Tristan McKenzie O'Meara
2022-11-02 02:37:43 +0000 UTCI like this, is magic going to be his main stat though? It does feed into agility
Donald Bagwell
2022-11-02 02:36:55 +0000 UTCBelieve it or not, I hadn't heard of Zenitsu when this idea first appeared in my mind. I was thinking of Killua from Hunter x Hunter. A friend of my pointed out Zenitsu to me like last year and was like: "So, he's got some of Zenitsu's moves." and my response was: "Okay...yeah, that's pretty similar to what I had in mind. I'll check it out."
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:32:17 +0000 UTCI love Hestia! It's Omori's fault for giving her genuinely good character traits, but then only focusing on the stereotypical 'Jealous Girl' trope. Glad you like them though! It's fun to shake up the Canon!
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:29:55 +0000 UTCBell has the power of ZOOM!! The way he's going is making me think of Thunder Breathing, is that what inspired this story? Regardless, keep up the good work!
Kz3838
2022-11-02 02:28:49 +0000 UTCLove the story! Can’t wait for updates on the hephastus story and Inari story as well. I hope I’m not the only one but I like these stories without a annoying hestia around.
Michael Turner
2022-11-02 02:08:29 +0000 UTCI plan on it! I'm so glad you like them! With the strangle hold that Danmachi seems to have on my Muse, I might finish Journey to Hero and start the next one in short order. Who knows?
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:02:36 +0000 UTCThank you! Nice to see you enjoyed it so much! Inari, Hephaestus, or Demeter? Three good ones already, right?
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 02:01:31 +0000 UTCNice chapter like the other pilots you have published of danmachi, I hope that in due course you can see continuations of these if the muse allows it
sebastian contreras acuña
2022-11-02 01:54:34 +0000 UTCAlright. Loved the chapter Kairo! Here’s hoping either the muse takes over or someone uses a reward to get a second one. I especially enjoyed the scenes with Demeter. Lewd wholesomeness for the win! And of course the Minotaur scene was awesome. Nice to see Bell fighting back and even managing to injure the Minotaur, even if barely and it all but knocked him out.
Kaminoryu
2022-11-02 00:51:11 +0000 UTCWhen another story is finished, probably.
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 00:41:01 +0000 UTCI didn't like it boss I loved it when's the next chapter!?!
Ice fox
2022-11-02 00:39:28 +0000 UTCIndeed! I'm happy that you liked it!
Kairomaru
2022-11-02 00:33:21 +0000 UTCNYOOOOMMMMM ZOOOOOOOOOMMMMMM as Skelly would say
Ice fox
2022-11-02 00:32:21 +0000 UTCIaido is about the fastest sword art IRL, but it was developed with the curved blade of a katana in mind, so it doesn't work very well with straight swords.
Kairomaru
2022-11-01 23:07:36 +0000 UTCYou are completly right and i Just wanted to offer my Input. And the Speed build IS offen done with swords in Fantasy (Like this storry) but Not so much in rl
Mr. Finch
2022-11-01 23:02:42 +0000 UTCZappity Zap-Zap! Glad you enjoyed it!
Kairomaru
2022-11-01 22:58:39 +0000 UTCI think you mean Kusarigama (Chain Sickle)? That is a weapon that requires a lot of training to make work. Swords can be fast and especially so when you combined them with Magic. Ais makes a speed build work with her sword Desperate and her Wind Magic.
Kairomaru
2022-11-01 22:58:14 +0000 UTCI was worried there for a sec that’s a relief 😅
Esteban Gonzalez
2022-11-01 22:58:04 +0000 UTCNope. That was to explain why the Miach Familia wasn't destroyed and left destitute. They created a way to restore lost flesh and blood limbs. It also fits in with Miach's mythology too!
Kairomaru
2022-11-01 22:56:04 +0000 UTCGlad you liked it!
Kairomaru
2022-11-01 22:54:57 +0000 UTCYes, love the power of lighting. He got speed for days, can't wait to read more
TheMedia_Ghost
2022-11-01 22:53:52 +0000 UTCThunder Breathing mixed with HunterHunter's Godspeed.
Tristan McKenzie O'Meara
2022-11-01 22:46:40 +0000 UTCI think swords dont really Work with the Speed build you want to achiev for bell Daggers and Other small weppons Work better My Personal Favorit would be a kusaginaga a japanese weighted Chain sickle because IT IS deadly in Close and mid range and you can Restrain your opponents But Other than that great chapter and i await the next one
Mr. Finch
2022-11-01 22:45:34 +0000 UTCYou are worrying me because of the losing a limb part are you foreshadowing something with this?!?
Esteban Gonzalez
2022-11-01 22:38:59 +0000 UTCStories good so far can't wait for more.
DiabolicActor45
2022-11-01 22:35:27 +0000 UTCNYOOOOOOMMMMM!!!
Kairomaru
2022-11-01 22:29:09 +0000 UTCThe White Rabbit of Orario has gained the power of Thunder S P E E D
Tristan McKenzie O'Meara
2022-11-01 22:27:15 +0000 UTCThank you! I'm happy that you liked it! Was starting to worry that no one had any thoughts on it.
Kairomaru
2022-11-01 22:10:10 +0000 UTCInteresting, I look forward to reading more about Demeter's Bell and his lightning.
Benjamin Bravo
2022-11-01 22:07:41 +0000 UTC
