Umbra's Edge 03 - Dress Rehearsal // Useful Assets, comment/feedback post
Added 2025-08-30 10:44:38 +0000 UTCPart three of Umbra's Edge has finally been uploaded!
Click here for the updated PDF folder.
The artwork by Lucien is going out now to members of the art tier(s).
Any comments and feedback on the story? I'd love it if you were to leave them here!
Comments
Your comments, as always, are most welcome. I do try to make the setting more than "just" porn and I am glad I seem to make the balance work. Even if the world-building stuff aren't necessarily directly relevant to the character arcs it sure makes the setting way more enjoyable to write.
BKM
2025-08-30 17:29:20 +0000 UTCNot much to say in terms of feedback, as I continue to find the story both interesting and entertaining, it's well structured and has the right amount of length to it in my opinion. I will leave a comment like on previous chapters / stories. I continue to enjoy the overall world-building you've put into this setting, from the names of the various organizations and corporations to details on how certain technology works or background geopolitics, it really does make the setting feel authentic, which in turn keeps me invested (Outside the erotic sections which is always fun) I do enjoy the corporate aesthetic and presence throughout this and previous chapters, it fits a future Earth and again feels authentic - (Similar in many ways to Cyberpunk 2077 and others) It's also something that I haven't seen done well often Speaking of corporate presence - Excellent work on the design and personality of Franziska Schwarz, from her appearance, actions, interactions and motives, she fits the description of a corporate ceo business woman with traits of a femdom. While she's been in the story from previous chapters, setting up events in the background, this chapter prominently showed off her level of power and authority. Getting to the erotic section of the chapter - I did enjoy seeing her get her hands "dirty" with Kryno and the subtle hints that she found his male physique appealing. The method of her punishment and his predicament were great and equally fitting given her character and the situation. Her anger at him for his actions against her company and how he would end up paying his debt to her. Her vocal interactions with Trix were entertaining, especially when Franziska entered the room seeing Trix with Kryno and later on referring to Trix as whore regarding her attire. The ending was quite a good cliffhanger and I'm definitely curious to see what happens regarding the cargo that got stolen. Overall a fantastic chapter with amazing artwork from Lucien, they do incredible work when the two of you work together.
DeviantHunter
2025-08-30 16:30:15 +0000 UTC
