To Sate Her Thirst, part 2
Added 2025-04-30 14:09:12 +0000 UTCThis is the feedback and comment-post for the short story "To Sate Her Thirst, part 2".
The PDF for this story, the first part, and indeed all stories, can be found in the usual folder you will find when clicking this here.
The link to the companion artwork is being sent out to the members of the art tier.
I'll be honest, not my best work; I ran out of time. The story still became more or less what I wanted for this continuation/conclusion of this Dark Eldar story, but I will endeavour to do better with my next story. Regardless of my own feelings about it, I hope you all will enjoy reading it.
-J
Comments
I don't have much feedback to offer, at least in the critical sense given how little I know of W40K's setting but as a follow up from the previous part I found it a to a rather satisfying conclusion and erotically fitting for the dark eldar and chaos daemonette (At least in the pornographic sense) You expertly described the guy's torment and level of sexual frustration, given what the dark eldar did to him for roughly a year. You can understand why his soul would be a rather tempting offer for the chaos daemonette if you look at their methods in a lustful torment sort of way. Overall I certainly enjoyed the story and how you structure the scenes, wonderfully going over the details of the predicament, devices and describing the appearance of the chaos daemonette! I do look forward to your next story! :) Oh and the accompanying artwork from AndysDames is fantastic, they always do excellent work!
DeviantHunter
2025-05-02 00:06:38 +0000 UTCSorry this irks you so. The setting has been modified for pornographic purposes.
BKM
2025-04-30 16:24:03 +0000 UTCFeedback is primarily nitpicking bits of lore that just tickle in my craw. Like the idea that Slaanesh and its spawns would settle for a human soul compared to the soul of any aeldari, especially the drukhari so steeped in depravity instead of simply looking to claim them both much less ever release the thirst. Secondly is just the terminology that the term Greater in reference to daemons infers whether they are Greater or Lesser daemons. A Greater Daemonette so to speak would be a Keeper of Secrets or an Exalted Daemonette. Exalted being the usual title for daemons of both Lesser and Greater rank that achieve ascendancy over their peers.
Rustkarl
2025-04-30 15:48:38 +0000 UTC
