To Sate Her Thirst, part 1 of 2 (Comment post)
Added 2025-01-27 09:45:24 +0000 UTCThis story was removed, but has been re-uploaded to the link in the (pinned) post I posted yesterday where previously removed stories has been placed. Use this post to leave your feedback, if any, for To Sate Her Thirst, part 1 of 2. Future stories will now be posted in the same way.
To the one who keeps reporting me: if my work offends you so, I can only say it is not going to change much thematically in the future.
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I have, but until I have to I won't be moving anywhere, as it statistically means losing a lot of followers who do not follow you over.
BKM
2025-01-28 05:00:39 +0000 UTCEver thought about Subscribestar? I believe that they are more open to adult content. Potentially an alternative.
9th_Shadow
2025-01-27 21:02:37 +0000 UTCYou and me both. And thank you for the (as per usual) amazing feedback! I definitely tried, whilst keeping with the setting, to make it at least understandable to those who aren't much familiar with Warhammer 40k. If a sentence called for a "very-40k-type-of-word" I at least tried to make its meaning clear from the context, so I hope I was successful in that regard. Dark Eldar ruthlessness and nature is something I'd wanted to explore in a story like this for a long time, so it was a fun story to work on. It will reach a (hopefully) satisfying conclusion in the second part, when that drops.
BKM
2025-01-27 15:47:36 +0000 UTCReally don't understand why someone would support a creator but also continually report them, makes no sense. As for the story itself - As someone who only has a very basic understanding of the Warhammer 40k setting, I quite enjoyed it. I admit that certain phrases or terminology didn't necessarily connect with me but that's also okay as that can be something for those who appreciate the setting more can enjoy. Despite that, it is great seeing a writer applying their craft to create a story that genuinely feels like a part of a established setting, albeit in a more erotic theme. The predicament itself with our captive male and what the Dark Eldar women have in store for him is certainly erotic but with that sadistic twist that comes with Dark Eldar. I particularly like how the predicament is an experiment of sorts, seemingly born from curiosity, boredom and depravity but also with some sort of hidden goal at the end. It's something I can see happening especially if a Dark Eldar Mistress has done enough raids or lived long enough. The predicament, related sexual devices and the later scenes when the Dark Eldar get properly involved was certainly well executed. It was a slow, agonizing build up that that didn't reach a fulfilling climax, which is thematically fitting given the subject and situation the captive is in and experiencing. Overall I think it was wonderfully done and the scenes were described in a excellent manner as usual, for example I liked how you approached the scene as the captive was getting a rimjob as something unusual but also not unpleasant, as the captive's body begins to betray him and react accordingly from the repeated action of the tongues which are slowly but steadily creating a conflicting yet pleasurable sensation for him. I do look forward to seeing how it'll conclude in part two and of course the accompanying artwork from AndysDames is equally fantastic! The Dark Eldar certainly have the captive in quite the predicament :)
DeviantHunter
2025-01-27 11:30:52 +0000 UTC
