Deleted Scene from chapter 65: How to Melt Iron

I think it would have been great to be in the official chapter.

Testcase

This is absolutely perfect

David Moore

This is actually brilliant.

Red Viking

I love this deleted scene! But I do agree it wouldn’t match the flow of the chapter.

Calico C

imho even noncannon stuff is a fun/worthwhile add to the patreon. What-ifs, paths rejected, etc. Pls just be clear on labels or you'll have a lotta confuzled peeps :). And I agree, it can be a nice bit of bait to encourage/reward subscribers! :) Extras and chapters-in-adv are the two of the most common incentives folks use, I think?

fbt

The awww was a physical force of nature

Bobby B.

It already is. Read the his description by Go Rem

BRUNO ASTUR

I agree that the scene didn't fit the chapter, but it this is a very good way to try to improve your Patreon membership. Just make people know in your chapters that your Patreon have deleted scenes that, while canon, didn't make the cut for the chapter and post this little blurbs that may be used in as reference points for future scenes.

BRUNO ASTUR

Maybe work the reason Tigu is specifically calling him Handsome Man into the chapter? I think it gives good context.

Steven Howell

Or if he was there with his cart mountain to sell Jade Rice onigiri.

Bonifacio Mario Peña Jr.

while it did not fit the last chapter its still nice in a sort of mini interlope. Its allways nice to see the viewpoint from the other side.

Bookman

True. Also it would be funny if he suddenly showed up with a present for Tigu with no explanation when Jin is checking in on them during the tournament.

Kara Nina

I liked this, but I agree that will not fit with the chapter.

Guilherme Silva

I can see why you removed it. I think hinting what happened worked better for this chapter. Still, it was quite cute and I'd put it if (when) they face off in the main tournament.

Ivactheseeker

It would bring me massive joy if his “family” found him as a “leader” of every sect of influence because he’s the master to all the children before they take over as sect leaders

FlawlessMovement

I think that this segment or something like it could play a good role in the main release. Alot of this story's charm lies in flipping expectations into nice, wholesome scenarios and seeing xianxia scenes through the lens of 'nice normal'. Tigu turning the initial rounds into free pointer sessions and Gou Ren being casually unimpressed by the cultivators were my favorite parts of v2c65.2. And I liked seeing Tie Delun coming at Tigu seeing her actions though the lens of cultivator culture, then blushing under her honest compliments. Its a very compact distillation of why I read this. I agree with other comments that that getting partial dialogue via lip reading was a little off. We could easily guess that Tigu would be disarmingly nice to Tie Delun, so the actual broken up text was low content and disrupted the pace. Suggestion? Cut out the actual narration of the arena dialogue by the brothers, just have Gou Ren make resigned and embarrassed comments on the obvious back and forth between Tie Delun and Tigu, and later have a Tie Delun POV set after the confrontation but before he gets called up for his first match that fills out some of what exactly was said, with him being slightly confused, somewhat ashamed at his behavior, and slightly wondering about girls. I get the feeling that Tie Dulun is the sort that needs some time for his mind to jump to thinking about Tigu as a girl, so this would give him more time to get over his surprise.

Market Pamphlet

It is a very nice aside... I always enjoy the occasional outside points of view.

Eric Hicks

I’d rather pull the yun ren narration and replace it with a “whatks she doing? Look she’s instructing him!” convo. But maybe drop the courting bit at the end unless it’s gonna be a thing.

Matt DiMeo

This was great! I understand keeping this separate though, it wouldn't have meshed with the chapter but I love it as a stand alone!

Chad Hagner

This is hilarious I couldn't stop laughing

Luke Preston

I like it. You're probably right about it not fitting the chapter - the perspective shift would've probably been too sudden. From one unknown character to the next. Make it a whole separate chapter - a few months in the future he journeys to find Xiulan, everyone thinks he's in her sect to ask for her hand, but he just enquires about Tigu!

jaskij

enjoyed this. kinda hope a version of this is used later on .

Gary Hixenbaugh

Yeah to second or third this adding it to the end after something like a page break would work

J Klugh

I like this deleted scene.

Jan Alexander

That was delightful

Nigel Franklin

I think it should be added at the end of the chapter

John O'Connor

I liked this scene better than Yun Ren narrating parts of what is going on. This is especially true as his ability to read lips seems to come out of nowhere (and given Tigu would have been shouting and bouncing around should have been useless). and him needing to narrate things for his brother seemed very odd (granted this was made worse by the fact that I initially missed the fact he was reading lips and instead assumed he was able to hear parts of what was going on). The scene you used in the chapter was not bad, but it wasn't great either. This on the other hand, while I agree having a very different feel then the rest of the chapter, was a great scene and I'm really sorry you decided to cut it.

Michael Maor

I really like it, but I can see why it's removed. Maybe it will fit at the start of the next chapter.

Ask-if-I-like-lemons

Please include this scene. It's so good. Please include this scene. The public deserves to feel validated for loving tigu

Toknightly

I like this chapter for the way it plays against the typical troupes of a handsome man in Xuanhuan novels. I also like the idea of this guy, at some point, showing up on the farm trying to court the cat/daughter of a "hidden master".

I’m not sure he needs a shotgun, since he can probably obliterate this entire city without breaking a sweat

Noah

"How does one court a woman again?"

Adam Rosenberg

Yeah. Redundant. The way it was done in the chapter comunicated the same while also giving something to do for the boys in the spectator seats. Also having it a bit vague is always fun to have it later confirmed

Artur Vogt

It definitly needs to be in the main chapter, good info here

TheLost

I agree, it most definitely belongs.

Eric

I second that.

Flover

Oh this is perfect. It would have fit fine in the chapter. Tigu has a fan.

Len

CF will work this information in later another way if it's going to be relevant to where the story's going.

Termac

I would be 100% down for the next Arc after the tournament being a "Seven Brides for Seven Brother's" Arc as the disciples spirit away all the eligible young masters/mistresses in the Auzure Hills.

Stewart Boyatt

I think this should be offered to the readers outside the patron, even if you just unlock it to public and put the link in the ending author note on royal road when the OG chapter is released publicly

Aaron

I thought it was great. You could totally just add it at the end of the chapter, I know there is a little time overlap but I didn't mind that at all, it just fleshes out the story as seen by the brothers.

Grasenrack

Honestly, I liked this. Perhaps as a flashback in an interlude style chapter?

Teatime42

Fuck me are you kidding that's adorable shes so innocent

BigBro Bluesman

I feel like this fit, and if anything makes the chapter better

AirSak2000

Great as always

Donncha crowley

I like this. I was a little confused about what happened and who was who at the end of the chapter. This bit cleared up my confusion completely.

Buzz1089

I liked it. I hope it is or becomes canon.

William H

I really enjoyed this, shows Tigu’s aggressive honesty and innocence

Christopher Thomas

I like this scene a lot more than Yun and Gou watching the fight

BluEarth

The wicked challenger in the dawn hour The hero comes to save his brother at the chill morning The villainess crushes them both at noon. The hero goes to an elder for sage advice and tea in the afternoon The advice softens the heroin's heart and she leaves at the weirding hour. The families meet at the crossroad as the sun sets. The fated meeting at the hot springs in the evening.

Arnon Parenti

This absolutely feels like it should fit in the chapter.

Bunny Waffles

I think it would fit in great! I actually love this even more than the chapter

taukid

I liked it, it was cute.

Blacktide

This would have been wonderful in there. A shame it's missing. I loved it :)

Ashlazaria

Yeah I think this would definitely have fitted with the story^^

Vexdt

That would have worked nicely I think. It flows well with what u have written from other perspectives and its amusing. Further, it gives you something to balance later cuz I have a feeling that snooty kid Jin knocked around is going to find Tigu to be someone he "should recruit for his sect". This could give the HI YM a visible reason to try to upset that process, which will surely cause great fun for Tigu and the boys.

WyldFyr3 Damon

Simple expand it and just make it its own chapter if you feel it fits the overall narrative and adds to the story.

Dale

This is great! How dare you delete such a nice scene 😂, now I please upload all the others, what other gems have you been keeping from us!

RainyCats

This is a whole 7 chapters arc

Arnon Parenti

Jin should start rehearsing the Father speech. Who knows maybe he will even manage to a shotgun in time.

JohnZ

This is great, even though it didn't work with the chapter.

Jonathan Shaw

Oh, I hope this scene comes up later just so Tie has to interact with those around Tigu when he tries to court her.

Ironforge

Maybe next chapter, or as a flash back when Xulain "interrogates" him as the senior sister of Tigu?

Seadrake

Oh no, he's likable How could you make another likable Young Master/Mistress? Now I want more 😩

Sassy

This is wonderful.

Jonathan Brewster