Chapter 248: Halloween Party (5)
Added 2024-06-02 16:52:08 +0000 UTCComments
hi author maybe edward can play a main act in something like the walking dead or game of thrones? will be sick
Mr.goldenweek
2024-06-05 18:06:21 +0000 UTCbtw you can also let edward create minecraft
Mr.goldenweek
2024-06-05 13:45:00 +0000 UTCHey just wanted to say that I love this story and I hope your mother gets well soon.
Sam Winchester
2024-06-05 03:04:14 +0000 UTC"another love by tom odell" is good song for that situation with haley and taylor...
dianerga
2024-06-04 12:57:54 +0000 UTCI feel it had the correct effect. Hayley still cares too much about her popularity in school, and has that initial infatuation with him based off what she had planned for the party. Given his fame and talent any lead paired with him will have to have a very high level of maturity and self confidence. Since we are seeing different shows being integrated I feel we need a poll for the next Lead. Maybe have that new lead be a few years older then him?
Edgar Gonzalez
2024-06-02 19:17:40 +0000 UTCIt wasnt bad. However, the Haley development seemed a bit forced. Yeah i understand why you did it, but it still feels meh. I would have been ok with their on/off relationship until he finds a way to delete the "curse". Also, the party feels a bit dragged on (not sure if im using the correct word here). Btw, you had a grammatical mistakes at the beginning of the chapter. Him instead of her, in one of the first few paragraphs.
Ivan
2024-06-02 17:20:46 +0000 UTCI don't know what the effect you were trying to get across was, but I think that this chapter was necessary for a lot of personal development and to avoid that law who of the employment relationship early with Haley in season one or two. She still in her immature phase and she does have to go through a relationship even if it has to be with Dylan but it's something that has to happen for the plot
Dead3nd
2024-06-02 17:09:39 +0000 UTC🙏🏽
Dead3nd
2024-06-02 16:53:04 +0000 UTCI struggled a lot with the chap, as I don't think it had the effect that I want. For the first few readers, please tell me if you like the chap or not so that I can delete it if it was bad.
Muhammad Shafiq Mohd Nizam
2024-06-02 16:53:02 +0000 UTC🙏👆
L
2024-06-02 16:52:37 +0000 UTCFirst
Julien
2024-06-02 16:52:35 +0000 UTC
