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I'd tweak Goku's line from, "I accept the combat!" to something less formal, like "I accept!", or "Sure, sounds fun!"

Sir_Loin_Stake_Cakes

Thank you so much for your help!

YAMAMOTO DOUJIN

Personally I would change "You dare?" to "You down?", "I accept the combat" to "OK, challenge accepted!" and "There is nothing better to heal wounds!" to "Nothin' better to heal your wounds!"

Punisher

Im down with Dragonslayers comments

ONROK

Or Goku could say something more like "Alright, challenge accepted."

James Sullivan

And change her question to you down? It is a form of slang

The Dragonslayer

Caulifla should say “We’ve come to challenge you to a rematch”

Karina

Change to “alright I accept your challenge”

The Dragonslayer

Very good.

"There is" is another example of two words that can be contracted in English to "There's". The English itself is otherwise great, but we tend to use contractions where possibly- almost habitually - so I hope that helps

Ochaco1

Goku’s not casual

The Dragonslayer

Or to make it more country form of speaking "Nothin' better to heal the wounds"

SparkingSaiyan

All good, the only thing would be the "there's nothing better" instead of "there is nothing better"... To make it sound more casual! :)

ONROK

You can take out the “there is” to “nothin’ better than to heal your wounds then this”. It is more in line with Goku’s county form of speaking

The Dragonslayer

Yup all good

Pixel Slayer


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