the twine game is RELEASED ("The New Hive", v 1.0)

Enjoying it so far (i guess that's obvious since i subscribed based on it lol). You managed to paint a vivid picture of the world without huge chunks of exposition. I like how the PC isn't completely faceless but isn't too defined, and what details we do get are cool and feel like they suit the setting. It struck a nice balance imo (although tbf that might be because I have tanned brown skin and black hair shaved at the sides lol). Your prose is really good, economical but quite visceral and good at painting vivid pictures. I love how you avoid assuming or forcing the players emotions while still having the writing and characters feel richly detailed rather than bare bones, it reminds me of teraurge's writing in that way if you've played that. The only reservations I had is really more of a personal thing that a real niggle, in fact this will probably be a selling point for many. The sex/descriptions are very visceral to the point of being unerotic for me - but i think that's bc i don't have a specific interest/thing for most of the fetishes. i played the game bc the writing was excellent and bc i'm capable of finding almost anything erotic if it's, well, eroticised and/or the PC/PoV is described as enjoying it, but here the writing was v realistic e.g. 'His cum resembles battery acid: it roils and bubbles merrily as it spills across the slither of earth between your hunched bodies. It smells a bit like it too, and when a particularly energetic hip thrust sends a noxious spurt across your chest, the fumes alone are enough to make you choke.' vs more classic romance book writing which i was expecting like idk, 'His cum resembles battery acid: it roils and bubbles merrily as it spills across the slither of earth between your hunched bodies. The smell isn't any less noxious, but when a particularly energetic hip thrust sends a spurt across your chest the fumes make you feel lightheaded and dizzy -- instead of burning, his thick seed tingles pleasantly on your skin, making you groan out loud.' (this is a poor illustration but hopefully you get what i mean).This isn't really a criticism like i said, it was just contrary to my expectations. actually it's a compliment since i assume visceral realism (or uh as realistic as monster sex can be i mean) was what you were going for? and while making the game more niche, prob doubly appealing to people into those specific things. that and other aspects of the game made me feel like you had a very specific vision while creating it and sticking to it made the game stronger and feel unified both thematically and as like a creative experience. like regardless of whether it works as porn for someone or not the content/game feels very coherent and whole, something that might not have been the case if you had softened it for wider appeal. imo it worked out as a good decision, development wise, to stick to that concept bc it meant you pulled off what you were going for very well, vs the risk of trying to swing for both and failing. plus bc the sex was so realistically written and the prose was so interesting and flowed well, so while for the most part i didn't find it very erotic it worked well as just like, an interesting artsy scifi transformation game. that's something i can say for very few porn games, that i enjoyed it even w/o the porn. wow this got super long and rambly sorry! tl;dr grug think writing good, grug like prose and worldbuilding.

Thanks for the bug report! Whoops yeah looking at it I think I made the triggering condition too precise, and I think i fixed it. I'll be releasing a new version (1.0b) later today which should fix it.

Reeally loving it! Might have an issue with getting Zhalk's and Jinn's threesome scene though; I've been following the walkthrough but all i get is Zhalk's facefuck scene, unless that's the actual threesome scene too? Although from what I've seen, following the steps in the walk through seems to always have Jinn return the eggs despite already being pregnant.

Hamsaur