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I'm really enjoyed the Divine Dungeon Series and I like the premise of this story. If you are welcome to feedback there was one line that really brought me out of the story which was the sentence where you mentioned Elon Musk's parallel universe twin.
Bsoxmk2
2018-03-03 00:26:54 +0000 UTCOh dang! That's a really good point, I'll have to cover that!
Dakota Krout
2018-01-23 22:57:30 +0000 UTCDakota, how does 2-1 time compression work if you’ve got players in the world using mouse and keyboard?
Leaf
2018-01-23 09:47:52 +0000 UTCIsn’t the capsules in “life reset” also called fiver? Very similar concept too, with the world being run by an AI. Interested to see where this goes :)
Leaf
2018-01-23 09:14:47 +0000 UTCMeh. Probably just an easter egg. The only thing of note is the "screen" the master necromancer seen. I wouldn't rule it out, but I just categorize it as interesting until the author does something, if anything.
Jacob Santos
2017-11-24 02:08:38 +0000 UTCI could totally see this tying into the divine dungeon series, with DD being a beta test of their new CAL AI. Not sure how I would feel about that.
grant pflum
2017-11-23 20:04:01 +0000 UTCUnless the rest of the story is going to be as quick paced. There is one thing I don't like about Dresden Files, is that it doesn't have breathers. I like stories that have breathers.
Jacob Santos
2017-11-22 22:19:36 +0000 UTCI like this start, but I also liked the preview. The preview had just enough clues to piece together a back story and provide motivation. The flow of the story is solid, but it is quite fast pace. Like a Dresden Files novel, where once it gets going there is no slowing down until the conclusion. I don't know man, it feels like these two chapters could be flashbacks, once the story has been established. The preview had just enough to wet the lips and want more.
Jacob Santos
2017-11-22 22:17:39 +0000 UTCI hope it is a different kind of Dungeon Corps novel. Does seem to go into the vein of Life Reset, Death Overlord, etc. If there is one thing I have said, it is that you can never have too much of a good thing.
Jacob Santos
2017-11-22 22:11:19 +0000 UTCLike to see where you go with this. could be very good
chris marshall
2017-11-22 20:38:30 +0000 UTC
