Chapter 120 (Book 3 Chapter 48)
Added 2022-04-04 04:03:09 +0000 UTCAuthor's Note: In accordance with the Kindle Unlimited release, this chapter has been removed. The post itself has been preserved for the sake of the comment section.
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It's nice that they've finally hit this point in the relationship, and the conversation itself was definitely very characteristic. The 'talk about it later' from Rob was both genuinely funny and something he'd do, a very good moment. Overall, satisfying, though I do have one comment; the build-up to this moment's been a long side-story-arc that's involved a lot of time, characters, and plot. It's been excellent, which makes the method and timing of resolution a mild let-down. Shouting out your love for someone at the worst possible time, right before X terrible event is a cliche meme for a reason, after all. It lends emotional impact and weight to the revelation (and honestly, the Han Solo reference that Rob blurts out and immediately regrets writes itself). It's used to heighten drama and tension because it's good at it, and while being original and subverting expectations is great, a good use of a classic is equally worth praise. While the decision to resolve the issue via alcohol-driven shenanigans isn't, itself, a bad choice, the fact that the whole scene takes place after the resolution for the ongoing, plot-driving conflict steals some of the weight it deserves. A story needs downtime between the escalating issues the protagonists face, and you've done a great job of fitting those in at appropriate points, but the pacing here feels off. The party has reached an incredible, important milestone in finishing the quest that Attunement has sent them on and facing incredible risk to put it to use; they've cemented their place amongst the Fiends, and saved a civilization; they're ready for rest, relaxation, and fun, and the reader is enjoying it with them as the rollercoaster settles down from the adrenaline of the biggest plunge yet. Except the fun, exhale-of-relief party turns into another small climb-and-drop. Rather than the relationship troubles being resolved in tandem with a stressful moment, as the blurt-out-love-confession trope relies on to emphasize both parts of said moment, or a steady exploration of the conflict that is the romantic difficulties themselves as a standalone story arc, it comes as an afterthought to the current narrative; an outstanding issue that's being wrapped up at the end of book, more than a climax in and of itself. This isn't inherently bad, and it adds to the sense of satisfaction and finality that came with resolving the Attunement questline, it just feels as though it's removed some of the importance that Rob and Keira's getting-together could have had. Granted, there's still the whole Zamira question to resolve; technically a solution has been provided, but I don't believe for a second there won't eventually be a heartfelt conversation between all three, or at the very least between Rob and Zamira. That might be the real climax to this relationship subplot that's been built up for so long, and I certainly hope so. Regardless, the last couple of chapters have been a fun and satisfying conclusion to book three, and I look forward to book four with anticipation. I've enjoyed the ride for a good while, now, ever since I discovered the story on Spacebattles back when Rob was trying to figure out how to not get murdered by an elvish mob, and I've yet to be let down. Thank you for writing, Potato!
ThunderousRegent
2022-04-06 06:15:18 +0000 UTCMeyneth gets straight to the point except when her own lovelife is concerned lol
Julia
2022-04-05 23:51:22 +0000 UTCScrew off.
1205
2022-04-04 23:13:16 +0000 UTCThanks Potato, that was absolutely perfect. I’m sure it was a tricky chapter to write but you nailed it. Also don’t listen to this whiner. ⬆️
David Bean
2022-04-04 23:10:21 +0000 UTCFound the attention seeker.
aaron clark
2022-04-04 17:19:19 +0000 UTCI was picturing a cradle made out of a giant crab's shell, but I like your idea better
Julia
2022-04-04 15:36:56 +0000 UTCHonestly their relationship buildup was so dragged out I skipped most of this chapter. A while a go I would have loved this chapter, now it is just boring and unrealistic. Their relationship is just a meme, a joke, making the entire story worse for the relationship being in it.
Torbjørn Nilsen
2022-04-04 14:38:42 +0000 UTCWell, as long as Diplomacy doesn't end up looking like the fairies in Zelda ocarina of time. It would be terrifying to have Zelda's most annoying character give the Rangers tutorials on relationship.
xxmaniaxx2019
2022-04-04 11:19:51 +0000 UTC"Never again," she muttered, eyes closed and head in her hands. "I'm too smart of a person to poison myself like that. A fledgling, halfwit assassin could've slain me as easily as a babe in their crab." Interesting to know that babies on Elatra can pilot crabs like mecha.
CMDR Dantae
2022-04-04 11:01:05 +0000 UTCToo far away, I think? Maybe it would still work, might as well try. Not sure Rob would have realised that the thing that brought him over gave Jason the system.
CMDR Dantae
2022-04-04 11:00:09 +0000 UTCAgreed. Since Rob's body isn't made of mana, which is implied to be why past elves and humans had difficulties having kids, it will be a lot easier for him to get her pregnant, which might be a pleasant surprise... Hopefully Diplomacy remembers...
CMDR Dantae
2022-04-04 10:58:32 +0000 UTCJust has to find a skill that eliminates the distance limit for party invites and then invite Jason. Simple as.
CMDR Dantae
2022-04-04 10:57:18 +0000 UTCIt’s a requirement for Status: Pregnant
OlivierA
2022-04-04 08:04:40 +0000 UTCI'm waiting for (Diplo)Macy to get a body and team up with Meyneth and absolutely wreck havoc on these rangers romantic hangups. I imagine good cop bad cop cornering their prey
Austin Boone
2022-04-04 08:02:49 +0000 UTCAm hoping now he has the message thing that Rob attempts to invite Jason to his party just to see what'd happen
Torauth
2022-04-04 07:23:45 +0000 UTCLmao,oved the chapter, shame it wasn't very explicit, but understandable. Looking forward to how their relationship develops And absolutely love Meyneth. She gets straight to the point! Next up, zamira? Long overdue as well
Catra
2022-04-04 07:23:11 +0000 UTCMeyneth is the best.
Moreno
2022-04-04 06:10:40 +0000 UTCWell done. I like the level of detail you went for with the romance. I wonder how this will affect them down the line in dangerous situations. Maybe this triggers one of those invisible requirements we keep seeing
Roberto Garcia
2022-04-04 06:06:41 +0000 UTCThe description says he can message members of his party, not anybody.
The 49th Khan
2022-04-04 05:28:57 +0000 UTCI can’t wait tell he realizes he can talk to the people on Earth. That is if the messaging thing works the way I think. I’m pretty sure it just says they need access to the System.
Thomas Alexander
2022-04-04 05:06:58 +0000 UTCAh finally, that order of pancakes I've been waiting on. So how long before Rob introduces Keira to sexting?
Nathan Linder
2022-04-04 04:43:43 +0000 UTCA long time ago I read Two Worlds on Royalroad, it depicted the two protagonists fucking for... I think three days? And absolutely trashing the hotel room they were in in the process because they were physically enhanced. I don't think that Rob and Keira are going to go that far, but food for thought.
Craxuan
2022-04-04 04:39:00 +0000 UTCI love this chapter so much. The tension between Kiera and Rob finally pays off, and it doesn't lead to some weird they are now embarrassed forever and don't get together. Meynth literally throwing them into a room together to talk it out is amazing, and was exactly what I wanted to happen lol. Also I am extremely excited to find out who the mentally traumatized one is, I hope we get to find out eventually.
Benjamin T Tuomey
2022-04-04 04:31:13 +0000 UTCThis is why I love Meyneth. Also didn't mention this on last weekend's episode, but I love the stuff on regular old Earth as well. That stuff really gets me theory crafting on what other connections/relationships the two worlds have.
Papa Pepperoni
2022-04-04 04:15:49 +0000 UTCThanks for the Chapter. Have a nice week. <3
Moreno
2022-04-04 04:06:16 +0000 UTC
