Chapter 43
Added 2021-05-28 04:03:44 +0000 UTCAuthor's Note:
In accordance with the Kindle Unlimited release, Chapters 1 through 38 have been removed. This post itself has been preserved for the sake of the comment section.
Comments
Yeah that is a pretty good haul of oof you've got there author, hopefully our plucky and depressed MC doesn't off himself and gets it at least somewhat sorted out
tibbish
2021-05-28 15:24:21 +0000 UTCFucking oof
DuskDeadman
2021-05-28 13:22:20 +0000 UTCi think the scene was perfect. no need to change anything for me.
Scesce Scesce
2021-05-28 08:43:04 +0000 UTCwell, that went better than I thought it would
Amelgar
2021-05-28 08:36:39 +0000 UTCGood advice. I added a transitional beat.
KamikazePotato
2021-05-28 07:58:14 +0000 UTCI enjoy this chapter. But I feel that Rob's emotional state and his acceptance that he is gonna have to shank a bitch should be drawn out or telegraphed a teency bit more. It could even still be accomplished while keeping that sense of ambiguity you seem to be going for in this scene. There are a lot of ways to do so. Personal recommendation? After declaring his resignation, something to give us a beat to understand and/or feel his resignation along the lines of: They were never going to hear his side or give him a chance. They didn't care how many lives he saved or that he was a person. To them, he was just another human. He was going to be put down, and that was the end of it. Okay. Obviously that's just one of the many ways to change it. You can keep it as is, but his thoughts and feelings of resignation don't seem to be given enough time to sink in for the reader. At least for me. It makes his immediate jumping into murder a tiny bit too abrupt for me to get behind or be ready for.
Ziggy
2021-05-28 07:25:26 +0000 UTCDamn, Rob is feeling like shit right about now, can't blame him either. First person he killed and feeling like it's his fault the people who defended him are in trouble...it sucks. Bright side though, crystal bearer is at level 2...so that's something.
Captaindrake123
2021-05-28 05:50:54 +0000 UTCSo, here's some random alternate scenarios about how the fight goes down if it happens in different ways. If Rob doesn't immediately assassinate the mage, they would have lost in almost every scenario. The Advance guards are strong and would have overwhelmed them in a 4 v 3. Keira letting them know about the Blight also saved their bacon, as it made the Ranger retreat, and their chances of winning a 5 v 3 were zero. Rob loses 1 v 1 to any of the them unless he gets lucky. Would have had slightly better chances if he had full MP, but he had to use it all at the start. He did good holding out, though, as the Swordmaster was his worst matchup. She just straight outspeeds and outskills him and there's not much he could have done about it. Alessia also fought her worst matchup. She somewhat specializes in telekinesis, which is weak against Strength types like the Warrior, as they can muscle through it. She won because she was smarter and more skilled. Keira wins against any three of them, most of the time. She's actually the lowest-Leveled person there outside of Rob, and technically has less years of experience than the Advance guards, but they're a bit out of practice. She most certainly is not. Danger Sense is also busted, and she's also *pissed*. Overall, it wasn't the riskiest scenario they've been in. But winning without casualties was definitely a hat trick.
KamikazePotato
2021-05-28 05:49:22 +0000 UTCElder Alessia gave him a long speech back in the Village about needing to be prepared to kill, and Elder Duran warned him in a roundabout way that he might need to fight when they met people from Reviton. Even then, he basically had to turn his brain off to be able to go through with it. (Also, while Rob got the first hit, Keira was actually the one to initiate hostilities, which is what provided the distraction.)
KamikazePotato
2021-05-28 04:59:29 +0000 UTCI'm surprised he went for the kill like that. I figured someone else would strike the first blow.
Lictor Magnus
2021-05-28 04:48:17 +0000 UTCGood chapter, thanks! They're in a bleak spot...
Mike G.
2021-05-28 04:43:12 +0000 UTC
