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[Hereafter] Chapter XLVIII: Conscription

An extra long chapter to make up for it being extra late.

This gave me some difficulty, not the least of which because I'm still getting a handle on Nero's personality. That's why it started late, and why it took longer to finish than I would have liked.

You can thank the editing team for that ending, though. "Haven't things been grim and dour for a lot of the most recent chapters? This one should be funny and light," was basically how that conversation went. What you saw was actually what was suggested.

Well, that's the result. I took the idea and ran with it.

Also, as a last note, I went with the "translation" of Nero's "umu" just because it really does sound ridiculous and weebish for a Roman emperor speaking Latin to use an archaic Japanese vocalized affirmative. I'm sorry, but it would have trampled all over my suspension of disbelief otherwise and thrown me completely out of my own damn narrative.

EDIT: Let's move this down one more time.

Comments

Mmm! One of the best things about Fate is the clash of ideals and characters. Not just the wonderful, but the weird.

Marc Beans

That part was almost entirely the editor's brainchild. He said things were too serious and needed lightening up a little, and suggested Rika and Nero swordfighting with loaves of bread. I made it happen.

Caractacus

"Umu!" is basically just to old, old, old version of the modern "Un!" You can translate that numerous ways, and in fact it has been. "Yeah!" "Yup!" and "Mmhm!" are just three of the myriad ways a translator might do so.

Caractacus

Only naive in this incarnation at least. Her Servant set has plenty of wisdom, it just is covered up by her eccentricity.

Marc Beans

I love everything about the bit at the end.

Marc Beans

I was wondering about whether that MmmMmm was “umu” given the tendency of Japanese to emphasize syllables.

Marc Beans

I hadn't thought of it before, but Nero does make a very excellent counterpoint to Taylor's character, doesn't she. Comedic,Teasing but Good Hearted, Extroverted, and more than a tad naive in some regards. It will be fun to see more of their by play going forward.

Mega Elite


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