Chapters-In-Progress: Sunder 5.5
Added 2018-03-08 14:00:02 +0000 UTCThis chapter is way late and it's taking me way too long to finish, so I figured I'd share it with all of you as an apology and let you see where, exactly, I'm having trouble.
Comments
Well, I have to say, I like the revisions made to this one. The events, such as they are, are more in character. Vicky's adequately eager to take down Taylor considering the situation and how close she is to Amy. Dennis is surprisingly silent, but considering he is, by sheer virtue of the other two being too emotionally attached, the only voice of reason among the three, this is understandable. If you're continuing down this track, then I'm eager to see where you tale it.
Gumban
2018-03-24 20:56:36 +0000 UTCI think they made her take it somewhere without witnesses, which might be why they were dragged so far off course. Still though, it is a little odd.
Aria Raney
2018-03-24 20:38:28 +0000 UTCTaylor's point is super valid with regards to the unwritten rules. It seems almost unthinkable that Gallant would allow Vista to confront her in civilian garb like that on th he street.
Gerand Rague
2018-03-12 20:21:24 +0000 UTC
