Lauri

Forest Tails Page 114 - the chatty version (HD)

Added 2019-02-27 10:10:54 +0000 UTC

So here's the first alternative version of a page of Forest Tails. As you can see, Nilibo was laying out a literal wall of text, even more than on many of the previous pages - half the page is talk and 85% of it is brown, so obviously things were starting to get out of hand. It started to move into preaching territory and the conversation had already dragged on for long enough/been very one-sided, so I decided to make a cut here and return to a more A/B/A/B conversation, a choice I definitely don't regret.

The "punchline" would effectively have been the same, with Nilibo putting a mirror to Nele's face about the choices she makes based on her upbringing, but I feel the version where she trips herself up is just that much more effective and more readable, aside from just giving Nele a little more to say :3

There's no continuation of this conversation stream, for obvious reasons, otherwise I'd be running two parallel comics at this point XD