WIP 1 Yelan x Shenhe
Added 2023-03-16 00:01:24 +0000 UTCI can already tell that doing the linearts will be pretty annoying. It was also pretty hard to draw Shenhe’s face from this angle, mainly because I usually don't draw faces from that angle. Overall I'm pretty satisfied with how it turned out, let's see how long the linearts will take me to finish. Anyways, like always I hope you like it and let me know what you think of it.
Comments
in case it got buried in the comments, I think yelan's foot could be redrawn as the foot looks flat and the toe doesn't look big enough.
jokerDynastic
2023-03-18 13:42:03 +0000 UTCI can't say yet, or if there even have to be adjustments. I have to finish everything up to the point that I can add the dialogue first to see if everything fits.
Knn-Hinotori
2023-03-17 19:07:56 +0000 UTCI divided it into more panels.
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 19:06:55 +0000 UTCAh, which pages do you want me to adjust?
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 18:51:16 +0000 UTCnope, nothing i would change, looks perfect! I just might have to break some pages into two due to the space per page, but I can only see that while I'm adding the dialogue.
Knn-Hinotori
2023-03-17 18:11:22 +0000 UTCAnything you wanna change?
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 17:40:37 +0000 UTCWow, I really like that ending!
Knn-Hinotori
2023-03-17 16:33:52 +0000 UTCAh, I also noticed Yelan's foot is flat and doesn't look normal. And her lower leg looks short as well.
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 15:03:02 +0000 UTCHopefully, I've made the last and final changes. What do you think of it now?
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 13:34:15 +0000 UTCActually I'm going to use your idea and change it so he adds them later on so there's more panels then
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 11:43:04 +0000 UTCI've changed it a bit and added dialogue for the dildo gag
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 07:01:36 +0000 UTCIt's not strictly lined. You could also draw multiple boobs in different shapes overlapping each other and faded to look like they've been moving around. Or just draw each moving away from the other to show them moving about.
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 06:25:19 +0000 UTCAsk absolutely I'll adjust and make some changes then
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 06:22:00 +0000 UTCI really like it! i'm not sure if i will be able to add the boob jiggling since i usually don't do stuff like speedlines but i'll give it a shot. I would also like to add about two pages at the end to incorporate the dildogag variant. but overall a really good story!
Knn-Hinotori
2023-03-17 03:00:00 +0000 UTCHere's a preview of the script. Let me know what you think. Also, if there are any mistakes, let me know as well. Scenario: Yelan and Shenhe are captured by Zhiyi who is helping the fatui destroy Liyue. They’re tied up on a wooden horse and toyed by him. Y: Yelan: Z: Zhiyi S: Shenhe Panel 1 Z: Yelan! It’s so good to see you again! Did you miss me? The Fatui here gave me plenty of intel and equipment to ensure you and your friend’s capture. Y: The Fatui?! You traitor! Where is lady Keqing? Z: Rest assured the Fatui are ‘entertaining’ her very well. But you should be more scared of me dealing with you. S: You bastard! You think I’m scared of a pathetic loser like you? I’ll beat you to a pulp. Z: HAHAHA, your words mean nothing. All bite no bark! You’re at my mercy so I suggest you behave. Panel 2 S: What is this humiliating thing you’ve put us on!! Take us off it. Z: PAHAHAHA, the Fatui requested this wooden horse just for this moment. I suggest you don’t move much on it. It can get quite arousing. S: Fun? This thing is digging into me! How can I have fun with this? Z: Perhaps a demonstration is needed. [he pushes them] Y: HNNF, stop moving me you pervert! Z: Oh come on, I thought you asked for this, HAHAHA? Anyway, enough chit-chat. Panel 3 Y: Let us go, Zhiyi and we’ll have mercy on you. Z: Let you go?! HA, I’ve been waiting to have my revenge ever since you humiliated me last time. [He pulls on the ropes] S: HNNF!! What are you doing?! Stop!! Z: Oh, what’s wrong? Are the ropes digging in, hahaha. This is just a taste of what’s to come. Y: Damn you, Zhiyi! Ouch ! Z: I’m going to thoroughly enjoy breaking you. Let’s start with your mouth, you’ve spoken long enough! Panel 4 [they are gagged] Y: [gagged noises] Argh, remove this gag!! Z: What’s wrong? I thought you liked this sort of stuff. S: [gagged noises] Oh God! What is he going to do to us? Z: Let’s start with your tolerance first. Y: [gagged noises] Oh god, what is that? Stop!! Panel 5: [vibrators are added] Y: [gagged moans] No, turn it off! S: [gagged moans] Urgh, what is this toy?!! What is it doing to me?! Z: Yes, YES! experience the humiliation you gave me. S: [gagged moans] I will kill you! Z: PAH, don’t glare at me like that, bitch. It seems I need to cover those eyes! Y: [gagged moans] No, please don’t! Panel 6: [they’re blindfolded] Z: I’ll let you stay like this for hours so you can experience the dark cell I rotted in for months. S: [gagged moans] Hours?! I have to endure this for hours?! Z: The Fatui need me to go check up on the other ‘guests’ we’ve also captured. Y: [gagged moan] NO, please stop! don’t leave us here!! Z: Don’t worry, I’ll have more fun with you two later on. Panel 7: [hours later] Z: I’m back, how are you doing? Y: [gagged moans] Zhiyi, stop this madness!! Z: PAHAHA, the joy it brings me to see you like this. S: [gagged moans] Turn it off, please! Z: Jeez, the wooden horse is all wet. How embarrassing to realize you have no control whatsoever. It seems you want to say something. Panel 8: [blindfolded and gag removed] Y: Zhiyi, stop, don’t do this! You’re making a mistake! Z: Mistake? I’m thoroughly enjoying seeing your confidence break. S: [panting] [huff] This is insanity. I hate this! Z: HAHAHAHA, oh we’re just starting. Please hold on a little longer for me. S: there’s more?! Oh god, no, please stop. Panel 9: [their tits are exposed] [add some boob jiggling to make it spicy] Z: Oh lord, look at those protruding nipples. You seem very excited, hahaha. Y: You shameless rat! How dare you expose us like this?! S: Oh god, please stop, I don’t like this! Z: Oh hohoho, these are perfect for my next contraption. S: Hey stop?! What are you putting?! Z: EUGH, look at your tits bouncing all over the place. Stay still, I can’t mess this up. Panel 10: [they are ring gagged] [nipple weights are added] [more boob jiggling] Y: [pained ring-gagged moans] OUCH, stoop!! It hurts!! Z: HAHAHA, enjoying the pain, are we?!! Good! S: [pained ring-gagged moans] HNF! Why is it so painfully arousing?!! Z: Argh, look at you drooling so much with that gag. How disgusting. To think you once defeated me. Now, look at the state you’re in. Y: [pained ring-gagged moans] Argh, you will pay for this!! Panel 11: [clamp vibrators are added] [more jiggling] S: [intense painful moans] NOOO, what is this?!! Z: HAHAHAHA, YES, let me hear those cries! Give me more!! Y: [intense painful moans] I can’t bear it!! ~HNNF!! Z: Finally, this is entertainment!! Even the clamps can’t dampen the bouncing! What a show for us!! S: [intense painful moans] AAAAAGH, I can’t stop!! It’s too much!! Panel 12: [hours later] [they are drenched in sweat] [they are ungagged] [things are taken off] Z: Oh, how are feeling my sweat Yelan. Ready to talk. Y: [panting] [huff] Zhiyi, I’ll negotiate. Please stop this. S: [panting] I beg your forgiveness. Have mercy! Z: Oho, it seems you’ve finally broken down. How unfortunate, I was looking forward to more, but I’ve overestimated you. Y: [panting] Please remove these. I’ll do what you want!! Z: Welp, fine. I’ll remove them. You are drenched after all. Y: HUH?! what does that mean?! No What are you doing? Panel 13: [they are naked] [they are ring gagged again] Z: These clothes need to go. Since you agreed to do anything, I want you to feel 10-fold the shame you brought me. Y [Desperate ring gag sounds] NOO, please Zhiyi, stop, I submit!! Please let’s talk. S: [Desperate ring gag sounds] NOOO, I beg you, don’t put them back on. Z: HAHAHA, how pitiful, OHO, it seems you want me to turn them back on. Well, if you must. S: [Desperate ring gag sounds] No, God please no! Don’t Z: Your plead is meaningless. I told you; I’m going to thoroughly enjoy this to the end. Panel 14: [everything is turned on] S: [intense gagged moaning] ARGH, it’s too much! I can’t handle it. Y: [intense gagged moaning] Noo, I can’t stop cumming! Z: HAHAHA, fun isn’t it? Sheesh, we just cleaned it and you’re already cumming and making it dirty again. S: [intense gagged moaning] I’m going insane!! Z: The Fatui aren’t in a rush for the intel so let’s enjoy this for a good amount of time. Now, I need to leave to see what else can I try on you. Y: [intense gagged moaning] Lady Ninguang, please help us!! save us!! Panel 15: [Only Yelan’s gag is taken off and stuff switched off] Z: I am back Yelan. How are you feeling? Let’s talk for a bit Y: [panting moaning] Oh god, Zhiyi! You’ve had your way. Please have mercy and turn them off! S: [intense gagged moaning] No, turn them off for me too! Z: I have to admit, I feel quite satisfied now. But what’s to say you won’t stab me in the future? Y: [panting moaning] [huff] We won’t tell on you [huff]. I promise! [huff] Please, just let us go!! Z: Oh wonderful. Now that I have a confession from you, I can finally put this on! Panel 16 [a dildo gag is held at their faces] Y: [panting and moaning] What no, we gave up. Why are you doing this?! Z: Why? Well, you’ve been a naughty girl ogling at the Fatui and making too much noise. So you’ve forced me to take extra measures as they’re getting distracted. Y: No wait, please sto~MGHMMMM S: [gagged pleads] This is crazy!! OH god! Stop what are you pressing into my mouth! Panel 17 [a dildo gag is added] [ they are blindfolded] Z: HAHAHA, tell me, how does it feel to have your cries get drowned? Y: [intense gagged noises] Oh god, I can’t speak!! Take it off!! help. S: [intense gagged noises] ARGH, why is this gag pressing down on my throat?!! I’m going insane!! Z: Unfortunately, I need to hand you to the Fatui now. Let’s just say, I’m just a taster of what they’re going to do to you, MWAHAHAHA. Y: [intense gagged noises] Don’t leave us like this!! We’re going to go insane! NOOOO!
jokerDynastic
2023-03-17 01:09:13 +0000 UTCYup, the same scenario.
Knn-Hinotori
2023-03-16 21:46:41 +0000 UTCWow that sounds amazing!! Also no worries I'll get right on the dialogue. It is the same scenario right? They're captured by Zhiyi whose in kahoots with the fatui?
jokerDynastic
2023-03-16 21:34:49 +0000 UTCThanks! I'll do my best to fix those parts. Btw. You can also write a dialogue for this if you still want to. I might end up utilizing the points i wrote down until now in a later pic when i refined them more. Just a few things to note so it can be added in the dialogue, im going to incorporate nipple torture in this one in the form of hanging weights from them and using vibrators on clamps instead of just taping them on as usual.
Knn-Hinotori
2023-03-16 20:11:00 +0000 UTCand her butt could be more protruded or rounder cuz its a bit flat. but thats assuming you want her to resemble the ingame as close as possible.
jokerDynastic
2023-03-16 19:48:07 +0000 UTCI feel like Shenhe's legs look a bit too thin. Especially with her physique.
jokerDynastic
2023-03-16 19:46:19 +0000 UTCThank you! I'm aware of some of the odd parts like the cloth at Shenhe’s ass (i'm just gonna leave the cloth piece away in the final version since it just looks weird however i draw it), but could you please point them out so i don't overlook anything while doing the linework.
Knn-Hinotori
2023-03-16 17:55:24 +0000 UTCYO you nailed it man! They look so good! They're perfect aside from a few odd things.
jokerDynastic
2023-03-16 14:34:17 +0000 UTC
