NSFW Throwback: Baker & Sabine 3

The rest of the Baker/Sabine scene! So, like I said last time, we were still very much learning about what "works" for sex scene art in a game like this, and I think the remainder of this scene is a good illustration of what I'm talking about. Let me just go through and critique our old work item by item:

• Although the posing isn't bad, what's lacking is a sense of motion and dynamism. You can do a lot with narration/dialog, and there are some easy visual novel tricks like screen-shaking that can inject a bit of life into a scene, but job one of art in a scene like this is to feel like things are moving and grooving. If we were to fix this art, I would want to see something like rippling on Baker's asscheek, some motion lines, and some blurring on Sabine's hand, just off the top of my head.

• There's also too few panels. If you've played our other VNs, you'll know that one trick we use in lieu of expensive animations is back-and-forthing between two panels of a sex scene with every successive click, giving the effect of an animated loop without having to actually create 60 different drawings. Since this is a spanking, it'd make sense to have at least a couple more "frames" showing the actual spanking impact, which we could repeat as needed. None of these frames really make sense to alternate between, there's too many details changing at once.

• The expressions are nice, but they aren't really telling a story. This is another symptom of there not being enough panels, the build feels very rushed.

• It's not clear where we are in space. Pulling back and showing a bit more furniture/environment would go a long way to making the scene feel grounded.

• One thing I've become a lot more cognizant of in scenes like this as time's gone on is the idea of "business" - that being, what characters are doing with their hands throughout. Sometimes that's obvious, as a character's hands will be occupied with whatever piece of the other character(s) they're currently grabbing, but in this portion of the scene we have three hands out of four that aren't doing ANYTHING most of the time. Baker having her fingers in her mouth in the 4th panel is a good exception, but we could have done a lot more. We could have seen one of Baker's hands creep up her chest, to her neck, and THEN to her mouth. We could have seen her fingers splaying out during one of the spanking impacts. We could have seen her start touching herself! As for Sabine, her free hand has no end of things she could be using it to grab: Baker's dress hem, its neckline, Baker's neck, or Baker's hair. She could also have reached around and touched Baker's cock! Just a lot of money being left on the table here.

Anyhow, none of this should be taken to mean I don't LIKE the art. I just think we've gotten a lot better at this over time, that's all. See you next week with art from a different scene!