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Lost Rambler
Lost Rambler

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As I sat at the kitchen table, continuing a fruitless search for any information about the bowling alley from our outdated version of the Atlas, Kimberly, Antoine, and Dina approached me.

“Can we talk?” Kimberly asked.

“I’ll have to check my schedule,” I said, but I smiled so they’d know I was really saying yes.

“What do you wanna talk about?” I asked.

“We need to discuss what happened today at Carousel Family Video,” Antoine said.

I was puzzled.

“Hasn’t that been what we’ve been talking about all day? I mean, we’ve been planning this trip to the bowling alley since before we even knew what storyline we were looking for.”

They looked at each other with a concerned gaze that made me uncomfortable.

“We’re talking about that poster,” Kimberly said. “Why were your parents on a poster? Those were your parents, right?”

“Oh, that,” I said. I thought for a moment, then replied, “Carousel’s just messing with me. It has been since the beginning—talking about my grandparents, just teasing me, that sort of thing.”

“Why would it put a picture of your parents—and you—on what looked like a storyline poster? That is what we’re asking,” Antoine said.

I shrugged. “Like I told you, it’s just teasing me. It’s trying to lure me back there, so I’ll fall for whatever trap it was the crybaby warned us about. Just Carousel being Carousel.”

The others didn’t seem so sure.

“Well, don’t you want to know what’s going on there?” Antoine pressed. “Why would Dina’s son’s ghost tell you to go downstairs, but the baby warns you there’s a danger if you walk in that direction?”

“I don’t know why,” I said. “We won’t know until we try it, and we agreed to put it off. If we don’t pull the thread, the sweater stays together.”

“Just because we’re putting off actually going there doesn’t mean we can’t discuss it,” Antoine replied. “Was that a real picture of your parents—and you—on the poster?”

I nodded.

“We took it on a trip to Six Flags, or some theme park, maybe a carnival—I don’t remember; I was too young. But it was in our house, the picture. I don’t know why Carousel put it on a poster, but probably just to mess with me, like I’ve been telling you over and over again.”

They paused, exchanging glances again, which was really starting to bother me. They were acting like I’d been diagnosed with some strange, deadly illness.

“I thought you were an orphan,” Kimberly said. “That’s what Anna said—that your parents died.”

I didn’t talk about that.

“So, if you know, why do you need to talk to me about it?” I asked.

“Because we’re concerned,” Antoine said. “How did Carousel know you’d be drawn to a poster with your parents on it?”

“Because it’s human nature,” I replied. “If it had been a poster of your brother, you’d have tried to read what it said.”

“Yeah,” Antoine said, “but my brother was literally in Carousel and died here. Your parents died over a decade before we even got here, didn’t they?”

“I’m telling you,” I said, standing up from my seat. “Carousel just likes to mess with me. That’s why it talks about my grandparents. That’s why it got Dina’s ghost son to try to lure me into a trap—actually, I’m not sure what was going on there, but the point is, it likes to mess with me. I mean, it gave me my old TV just a few days ago.”

“Your old TV?” Antoine asked. “That’s why Candyman is in there, isn’t it? I couldn’t figure out why or how you got a movie from our world.”

“Riley,” Kimberly said, “why wouldn’t you tell us that?”

“I did tell you that I had one just like that as a kid. I don’t know if it’s the same one,” I said. “I figured the details could wait until we decided to act on it.”

“If Carousel is starting something—or if God forbid, a Narrator is doing this—we need to know. We deserve to know. Didn’t you think of that?” Antoine asked, coming around the table to look directly at me.

I had considered it. After all, Dina’s little premonition about going downstairs had come to her right after Project Rewind was completed, which just so happened to be around the time Silas Dyrkon had tried to trick us.

So, presumably, it could have been a Narrator.

“Well, thank goodness we didn’t go down those stairs. And until we do, we’ll never know what’s going on,” I said. “I mean, does knowing about it change any—”

“How did your parents die?” Dina interrupted. “That poster—it had this off-color warping effect like it was supposed to be spooky or something, but it just looked like a family having a good time. So I’m asking—how did your parents die?”

I really didn’t want to talk about it.

“Murder. Robbery gone wrong, maybe,” I said. “They were just… killed. I never got answers. The case went unsolved.”

Of course, I was both telling the truth and lying. I didn’t know why they had been killed or who had done it. I knew it was brutal. It was hard enough on my grandparents and they only saw photos.

All I remembered was that I was watching a movie when it happened, and my grandparents didn’t let the police tell me anything more than I already knew. I never asked.

And I tried not to remember. For so long, it had worked so well.

Talking about my parents was one of my weak points. I was crying by then, and I could tell the others felt bad because they stopped acting angry or inquisitive. I think Kimberly even tried to hug me, but I just went to my room.

I didn’t know why Carousel was teasing me about my parents, and I really did not want to find out.

I had lived with the unanswered questions surrounding their deaths my whole life, but I didn’t want to learn those answers now.

Not here.

Not in Carousel.

Comments

Wait so is his parents getting killed while he watched the movie... The reason he got the bystander perk 👀👀👀👀

Neuos.t

The vibe I get from this whole thing is that carousel chose Riley as the film buff paragon. It seems he has a movie which hasn’t been explored tied to carousel the same way that the damsel did.

Josh Pfleeger

I definitely also feel like there is some type of connection between Riley's family and carousel, especially considering how much they like horror movies. They were lowkey giving Riley a training arc

Kristian

I like the little touch at the end of saying Riley was crying while he was being defensive the whole time, I feel like it adds character to how he was responding

EDMANGO

Yikes, poor Riley. I agreed that the last chapter's placement was weird on pacing but I do also think it was a fantastic chapter. It would be a shame to cut it entirely.

DeadicatedReader

A while back, we were told that the team has an invitee, who is almost for sure Dinah, a guide, and a secret keeper. Riley is likely one or both of the latter two. Andrew's team should also have all three. Maybe Riley is special because he was shown the axe killer, or maybe it's because he's a movie buff, or he has some strange connection to carousel. Maybe we will find out more by seeing which members of Andrew's team also have strange backgrounds.

Michael Vonica

I really hope you don’t cut the last chapter, I really loved it

Trent Cannon

That’s a great addition to the story. I really like the implication that his Oblivious Bystander trope originated from an actual event in his childhood.

Nine

Dead in Carousel after making a deal with Silas. They are now acting as the insider.

Slightly Morbid

But who are his grandparents then

Kristian

My suspicion is that the murder of Riley’s parents is one of those real events that Carousel either did or tried to drag into itself to turn into a storyline. My theory is that eventually they’ll have to run a storyline based on it. If so, I’m curious if Riley will get to play himself as a child or play someone else and have to see himself as a very accurate NPC, both options are ripe with possibilities.

Damian Karis

I get what you mean, but maybe Riley is using teasing because he’s trying to play it down, and make it seem not as bad as it actually is so that the others are less likely to bring it up again or try to comfort him

Damian Karis

You have to remember that the current readers reaction to how you're writing the story currently, will be different then future readers who will be able to read it all at once. Once the whole book comes out, people will be able to binge read it. Meaning they might actually like the change in perspective, if they read it all at once. People have a habit of focusing on all the negative stuff, but there are a lot of people who liked the last chapter as well.

Bakerdea

I thought this part was really good, both in showing dynamics between them all after a stressful situation that didn't end after a scenario and also showing both background and more of Riley's way of handling theory. Current pet theory: Riley is the last living Geist and his parents sneaked him out of Carousel and were later killed by the Axe Murderer for it. The Poster in the video store that showed Riley as a kid with his parents will be shown to have been photographed in Carousel. Riley has suppressed this memory so he didn't have to hear the constant breathing from the Axe Murderer

Slightly Morbid

Well damn. Seams Carousel picked someone vulnerable. You have to wonder why no one else gest threads pulled from outside their connections to the little hell carnival.

Kain01able

Gaaah. Man I want to see Carousel defeated and erased.

BelligerentGnu

Also please don't cut the last chapter. I don't care if you change or edit the chapter, I just really like seeing from other characters perspective.

Matt Erlendson

I wouldn't use the word teasing, it sounds too light-hearted to me. Taunting, tormenting, harassing or provoking would be my choice. I like that this segment give a bit more perspective on the other characters increasing awareness of Riley as different.

Ben Tew

Cool backstory info on Riley and a good teaser on future plot.

Matt Erlendson


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