First-Poll
Added 2025-03-02 21:44:41 +0000 UTCHow are you guys liking the relationship in the story so far? Did I overdo it? Should I go back and change it?
Comments
Honestly I love the way you portray the relationship. Most authors forget about it then guilt-make a forced chapter or two that's only about them, just to once again forget about it for the next 25+ chapters. You include it into most chapters, as it should be since they are in contact more than once every 2 weeks😁 this way the readers develop some attachment every chapter, and couple chapters don't feel like flashbangs lol
Dario Adam
2025-03-02 22:31:25 +0000 UTCI think the relationship part has been good so far. Earlier in the story it felt like 75% matches, training, and reactions and 25% personal life. Which makes sense as Tristan didn’t have much going on off the field yet. He was still trying to prove himself as a player. Lately it’s felt like it’s been the other way around, 75% off the field stuff and 25% matches and training. Which also makes sense as Tristan has exploded into being a super star, and he is establishing himself off the pitch for the first time. I have enjoyed the story a lot so far, the relationship, the team he had built, and the brand deals, etc. are key parts of Tristan’s story just like games and training are. I do think maintaining a good balance between the two is going to be key as the story gets longer. Focusing too much on only off the field stuff can make the story feel very slow paced. And focusing too much on football makes it feel like we are skipping lots of the details in Tristan’s growth. I think you’ve done a good job there so far and other than your standard edits I’d say don’t change much if anything about the relationship. It makes sense that you spent a lot of time focusing on it with where the story is at right now.
TheSonicTurtle
2025-03-02 22:18:31 +0000 UTCIts different from similar storys i read which is great, i want to see where you take it at least :)
jesperAspackad
2025-03-02 21:49:10 +0000 UTC
