[Salvos] 690. Envy (Removed for KU)
Added 2024-05-19 16:51:36 +0000 UTC(Removed for KU)
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It's interesting how Taburas seems to be the complete opposite of Salvos, in a sense that she presents her selfishly motivated actions as altruistic, while Salvos presents her altruistic actions as selfish.
Danijel Turina
2024-05-20 08:18:25 +0000 UTCIt's just burnout, that's all really. I find it much easier to write non-Salvos POV chapters, because I've written too many Salvos POVs that I'm burnt out.
MelasD
2024-05-19 21:33:19 +0000 UTCAlso, “That’s because Salvos is reliable, Taburas. She has always been reliable.” is not the most emphatic statement of love and loyalty he could have made. If anything, that's how people feel about cars that required little to no servicing. In other words, tools.
Danijel Turina
2024-05-19 20:50:19 +0000 UTCLet me address the elephant in the room based on our recent discussions: Haec His supposed trust in Salvos this chapter is nice but without actions to back up the talk, he'll only increase their estrangement and push Salvos further away imo. Salvos clearly wants him to support her.
Dragonmaster_42
2024-05-19 20:43:57 +0000 UTCThanks for this chapter as well! I'm sure you are busy, but let me ask my open question from last chapter again: I'm curious what the difference is between the recent (longer) Edith/Mavos chapters and the current (shorter) Netherworld chapters? Is the latter harder to write? Do you feel like it's harder to get right? Or does it feel like more of a drag as you have a long term outlook you want to extend and there is just a lot of footwork to be done until then? From my own attempts of writing I know all of those, so I'm curious how it is for a much more experienced writer such as yourself, MelasD! Thanks in advance!
Dragonmaster_42
2024-05-19 20:35:40 +0000 UTCShe did mention she was forced against her will to work with them. Following Haec was her choice.
Matthew Sekel
2024-05-19 20:28:24 +0000 UTCI thought Taburas' sin was mentioned to be envy, but I can't find it, so I might be mistaken. Not that she's all that dangerous in the grand scheme of things.
Dragonmaster_42
2024-05-19 20:08:46 +0000 UTCWell, she's a succubus in a species that doesn't even have sex, and where jealousy makes no biological sense. It's actually hard to figure out such nonsense if you don't have the genes for it. For a biological species jealousy makes sense - the other person gets to reproduce and not you. However, possessive love makes no sense if you don't pair bond into a reproductive unit. This is why the way Salvos behaves makes perfect sense; she's completely non-possessive and non-jealous, but she's also loyal to a fault. Taburas, on the other hand, has all the bad qualities of a human woman, but without any of the benefits that would biologically warrant them.
Danijel Turina
2024-05-19 18:05:10 +0000 UTCIt's such a right thing to say if you want to motivate them. :)
Danijel Turina
2024-05-19 18:00:36 +0000 UTC“And am I not reliable too?" - the first team you were with, and whom you backstabbed, would disagree.
Danijel Turina
2024-05-19 17:59:26 +0000 UTCShe sobbed where stood -> where she stood
Danijel Turina
2024-05-19 17:53:58 +0000 UTCIs Taburas an archdemon of envy? I always assumed it was lust, but if it's envy, boy does this have a potential for going south in a hurry.
Danijel Turina
2024-05-19 17:52:59 +0000 UTCman he is denser than a black hole
Zuuuuuri
2024-05-19 17:51:17 +0000 UTCDemons of Cowardice :) I want their stats!!
Użytkownik Przeciętny
2024-05-19 17:49:38 +0000 UTC"I... have no opinion of Salvos as a person on her own.” - oh yes you do, yandere chan, you just hate the opinion you have. :)
Danijel Turina
2024-05-19 17:43:39 +0000 UTC
