Conquest: Attack on Titan 1.3 (ch. 3)
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I appreciate the feedback, and I don't really disagree with anything that you said but I would like to make one thing clear. I wrote this story over the course of a week to distract myself from my upcoming surgery. This story is dumb, stupid, mindless entertainment that I had no idea what I was going to write until I was writing it. That, and I wanted to polish off some of my lewd writing skills since there was one coming up for TGL, since it's been a while since I wrote a lewd. If I was going to write this story seriously, as in with the intention of it joining my weekly rotation, I would have written it differently from the onset and taken out the harem elements as they are. So, no Relief Regiment. Additionally, I would have increased the Attack on Titan jump from 6 chapters to 10 so there would be a lot more room for development of the characters and side characters. Since the story has been a bigger hit than I expected, I probably will do that if this story wins the next story poll. Or, at the very least, tone the harem hijinks down significantly for subsequent jumps. But, as it is, when I started I wanted to write something that I didn't have to take seriously and something that would enable me to write lewds for practice.
IdeasGuy
2025-05-24 15:34:42 +0000 UTCDamn, this series is literally almost perfect. The only thing that really makes me uncomfortable is the clear typial male-power-fantasy women harem. Like it’s one thing to have a harem itself. It makes sense, he’s a lone alien who needs to repopulate, and negociates fairly for that. But functionally? It’s the way they’re nothing more than animate fleshlights, he literally uses them interchanably, dumps them afterwards in his and their mess with no care, and wanders off. No exploration of them beyond “He’s the protagonist, he collects women”. Like I wish it was more respectful. Like they actually had stuff to say, agency, wit. He actually treated them like, ykno, friends or at least respected individuals he’s living with. Instead it’s barely better than a collection of pets. Like the subconcious language is just icky. The way he’s like “Yea this girl is royalty and such high born, and yet she’s bouncing on my cock” implying that by doing that she’s like dirty or “ha for all her pedigree look how pathetic she is” which is honestly extremely surprisingly mysognistic for a story this otherwise solid. Like it’s honestly baffling. It’s the kind of sex/relationships I’d expect in a literal wattpad male Gamer harem fic. The “I collect waifus and they are nothing but my toys” thing. Not what I’d expect from a writer of your quality honestly. It’s unfortunate because i love these types of stories, alien/advanced indivudal exploring, interacting with and advancing less advanced world through rich interactions. It seems like a good, mature story of that with this really out of place male alpha macho power fantasy glued on. Like why wasn’t the harem just a bit more mature? Like the women actually approached it like, ykno, their actual professional bearing they should? Like discussing with each other and themselves conduct, actually behaving respectfully, with self respect. Treating Gallick like he should respect them if he wants their bodies, and of course, enjoy having sex with a handsome man, but contained to the private bedrooms where the acts happen, and when they’re supposed to. Instead you’ve taken professional, badass military trained women, and made them degrade themselves like literal dogs. Letting themselves be dropped on literal furnature, used, and left in their own mess, panting like some desperate brain dead sex toy, engaging in really degrading acts with no self respect at all. No care for others seeing them treated this way. Expressing zero sexual preferences to Gallick for themselves except “Utterly at your mercy for your use” which is so unrealistic that it breaks immersion completely. Like none of these badass, military trained women was like “ykno what? no, I want to have you lay down and I wanna control the flow of things”. Like not even one? None of them decided to be a human with a spine and self respect? And what if they did? What if one of the women did say to Gallick “I’d prefer you treated me as an equal instead of a toy/pet” Would he just ignore her and just have sex with the others who let him act like a characature of some manosphere “Alpha”? Cuz that’s not powerful, masculine man behavior if so, that’s man child “has to be in total control at all times to feel powerful” behavior. And if he is not that insecure, why is all the sex depicted in the same, bland, all the women are interchanable sex toys for him to use however he peases, way? Why not make them like… actual people with professional bearing? Idk, it just sucks cuz all your stories are cream of the crop. Even the ones with polygamy or harems have the women (cuz it’s always, always the women who are in the harem, and always just with one man) actually have personalities, interests, preferences, and have the man care about them deeper than “you hole, I use” Like Vergil in the YJ insert. He ended up with more than one woman, but it was earned. He treated each with respect, and they could tell him to fuck off and he’d actually listen. Here, you’ve created a dynamic of total, complete, literal perverse power imbalance to the point you may as well have just done a system of artificial inseminaton, cuz it has the same emotional relevance. The only reason I can see it doesn’t is just to have the MC have a power trip where he can be like “I didn’t get women in my old life, so now I get to treat women like toys and use them however I want”. Which is just… icky. It’s something I’d expect from… a different kind of story. I know a lot of your stories are at their core, power fantasies, and do enjage in typical male centric sexual fantasy, but this is like stretched to the point of almost-parody. It’s the one aspect of the story that is weighing down the rest of the amazing parts. So maybe like, some of my hopes going forwards are: have the women in the harem act with more diginity, and seperate their sex acts from the rest of their being. Have Gallick’s sex with them be more interactive instead of him using the as dolls. Have scenes where he has to cater to them in various ways to show he’s not an incel man child who can’t handle a woman he’s having sex with have imagined power, and finally, have him actually talk with/act like friends with these women outside of the sex, and stop treating what they’re doing as degrading them to please him in his subconcious language. Show that it’s more of an actual friendship, they chat, laugh, joke, tease. They have sex and enjoy it, but respect each other outside of that. Maybe have a couple of the girls develop independent relationships with each other completely outside of him, and make it so they refuse to let him “join” it to show they have sexual autonomy outside of him. These are some aspects i’d expect from a mature writer like you to turn a harem into an actual functional thing with proper characters than what it currently is. Anyways, those are my thoughts, it’s almost perfect, every part genuinely is, except that one, which detracts everything else imo. edit: Also, PLEASE dont have that girl you just introduced be added to his Harem like a damn Pokemon. Like just treat her like a compotent, rational adult human who acts like a male would act in a situation like that. I have a really, really big feeling the MC will act in a classic weird machismo way to her and she will inexpicably, illogically develop an absurd attraction to him and then lose total agency and personal autonomy and just flops over, both literally and figuratively, for his misellenous use. Like I’m predicting that because that’s what a typical Gamer-style absurd male-power-sex-fantasy story would do in this situation. New girl introduced, is stripped of any power, non sensically accepts this utter dedgradation and begins worshipping at the MC’s dick. I pray that this will not happen to actually have at least a bit of realism, but I’m not holding out too much hope so far. We’ll see though!
Princeytron
2025-05-24 14:53:59 +0000 UTCSo thought; would an Ackerman's bloodline produce Legendary Super Saiyans? Or something like an Ultra Saiyan? Cuz the Ackermans have a beautifully artificial mutation that would work super well with Saiyan blood. I can see that Mikasa's brood will be the main ones part of the Saiyan Royal Family that Galick makes for himself. Krista's might be backups perhaps? I do wonder how Saiyan Titans would work, considering their Oozaru and natural power...Eldian Saiyan Titans would be, like, hundreds of times worse than normal titans, right? Cuz I would assume it scales with the race's natural power. 🧐
Deathknight134
2025-05-24 14:33:12 +0000 UTCThis is great.
Joshua Graham
2025-05-24 01:11:34 +0000 UTCNah, its mentioned at one point that if one of the nine dies without passing on their power, it transfers to a random eldian instead. And Eren can't use the power of the Founding Titan at the moment because he lacks the blood of the royal family.
Neruz
2025-05-23 20:14:27 +0000 UTCGreat chapter! Not a big of attack on titan necessarily so don’t really know the significance of some of these people but really looking forward to what happens next.
Sebastian
2025-05-23 19:45:08 +0000 UTCDamn good chapter
MyAfroAteMyDog
2025-05-23 19:41:37 +0000 UTCCaptain, come look at these readings! We’re getting responses from all around… we… we’re surrounded by PEAK!
Diego C
2025-05-23 18:07:33 +0000 UTCgod damn im not even that a big an AOT fan never finished the series but now im reeled in.
UnlimitedLikes
2025-05-23 17:50:09 +0000 UTCSo he caught Lara and ended Zeke. Well Lara’s definitely getting the mating press for the Warhammer Titan or she going to be killed and feed to one of the loyal harem members. With Zeke’s death will he end up in the Coordinate and is the Beast Titan just gone for good now? I think Eren will be able to influence other Shifters in his medical coma since he has the Founder wouldn’t he connect to Coordinate with all his energy being focused directly to his mind. Great chapter thank you for it despite being in pain with your recovery.
Zero00heroes
2025-05-23 17:35:47 +0000 UTCNo creo que me puede sentir más en conflicto que con este Capitulo en lo que respecta a Mikasa, la Trama va muy bien, el Protagonista se está tomando su tiempo pero esta avanzado hacia el Objetivo, me gustó bastante como trato a Zeke y Reiner, nunca me gustaron mucho en el Canon. Pobre Armin su sueño se cumplio y rompió en un parpadeo, su único consuelo es que Eren no estuvo aquí para presenciar la revelación de que el Mundo no estaba tan vacío como creían. Y Mikasa... Galick sabe lo que hace, dudo mucho que pase demasiado tiempo antes de que la lleve a la Cama, el Sexo es una buena distracción cuando el mundo que conocías se quema hasta las Cenizas.
ADDM2017
2025-05-23 17:35:40 +0000 UTCMore
Dragon Cross
2025-05-23 16:33:51 +0000 UTCDOMINATION VICTORY.
Nate
2025-05-23 16:28:23 +0000 UTCFuck Zeke
Soren
2025-05-23 16:25:18 +0000 UTCNice Zeke is off the board immediately.
Simplexity
2025-05-23 16:17:05 +0000 UTCStrongest waifu get
Otium
2025-05-23 15:41:53 +0000 UTCAnd so it begins. Eren, we're gonna finish the fight
Glitched Knights
2025-05-23 15:40:14 +0000 UTCDamn
JustAFan
2025-05-23 15:32:41 +0000 UTCYes please keep pumping these out fast like this you just made my morning
AKi1red
2025-05-23 15:10:14 +0000 UTC
