Anna's Unfaithful Life - Book 1: Beer Pong Gone Wrong
Added 2025-12-16 19:00:03 +0000 UTCWARNING! A new version will be published soon with better polished text.
Anna, alone at home while Elias is traveling, goes to a party with her friends. A simple Beer Pong game ends up going wrong and Elias tries to figure out what happened by checking everyone's online posts and chatting with friends.
Comments
I'll finish when you republish with the dialogue fixed. Because it's hard to read as it is
Adam Conrad
2025-12-17 20:15:01 +0000 UTCYou can read the answer I gave to Greg. Sorry about that.
DigitalArtNovel
2025-12-17 16:57:01 +0000 UTCYou can read the answer I gave to Greg. Sorry about that.
DigitalArtNovel
2025-12-17 16:56:55 +0000 UTCI received a comment recently saying that my sexting dialogue was too literal and didn't feel like real texting, with awkward phrasing and some mistakes. I think I approached it the wrong way and I'm sorry about that. It was an experiment with a social media style format, but I definitely missed the mark. I usually take more time to rephrase and polish everything, but this time I published a rougher version thinking it would feel more realistic. That was a mistake. I'll take a few days to fix it and republish it with dialogue that feels more natural, like I usually do.
DigitalArtNovel
2025-12-17 16:56:01 +0000 UTCI agree. The writing on this one is terrible and it takes away from the enjoyment.
Rob Gee
2025-12-17 15:57:57 +0000 UTCI just started this and I agree with Greg. So far the English is terrible. I haven't noticed this before from your stories. Much less enjoyable to read. What changed?
Drew
2025-12-17 13:13:35 +0000 UTCHonestly was loving Elias's fighting back at first. Like dude, set boundaries and if she doesn't respect them she doesn't respect you. Simple as that. LOVED the idea that she doesn't remember what happened in the end, makes you wonder if he'll tell her or not. Like he 100% should to stop any future situations like thay arising. Probably just wants to ignore and forget it all tho.
Gavin R.
2025-12-17 10:05:38 +0000 UTCWhat's up with the choppy English dialog in this? Feels like a bad AI chat bot. Glaring drop in quality.
Greg
2025-12-17 07:58:58 +0000 UTCJust saw the post.. concept for this story looks really nice and promising... Looking forward to reading this
Rahul Aggarwal
2025-12-16 19:27:19 +0000 UTC
