Chapter 390: Salvage
Added 2023-06-02 07:00:55 +0000 UTCBefore Argrave stood his top ranks in this expedition—everyone who had some degree of authority. The three Veidimen officers, the Magisters, Mina and the Monticci family, and lastly his family, Orion and Anneliese. These were all people of proven trustworthiness and skill, and he needed precise delegation and execution at this critical juncture.
“Artur—you’re going to the Mother’s Steppe. I need you to contact Moriatran and Ganbaatar, tell them about a delay,” Argrave commanded, looking at all before him.
“Me? You want me to get them, Your Majesty?” Artur repeated incredulously.
“You’re the fastest, floating on that enchanted mantle of yours,” Argrave nodded. “And with your magic very depleted, you can’t cast S-rank spells. Most importantly of all, despite some pitfalls along the way, I trust you.”
The Magister did look slightly affected, but that faded quickly as he gave an affirmative nod. “I’ll do it.”
Argrave nodded and looked off to everyone else. “We’re going to the coastline of the North Sea, where the ships I called for will be docking tomorrow morning—we can’t sleep, not tonight. I had intended Elenore to send men to help purging the land of the remnants of Kirel Qircassia’s forces, but we’ll make use of them.”
“Make use of them for what? What’s happening?” Nikoletta asked, still out of the loop.
Argrave looked at her and her father. “For starters, we’ll use their ships. You and Duke Enrico will be going back.”
The old duke had barely had the chance to say even three words, but even still he recognized the situation and gave a steady nod. Nikoletta, however, began, “But I want to--!”
“You need to go to Elenore, and you need to deliver her my words exactly as I say them,” Argrave interrupted her. “These are instructions I can’t risk being leaked.”
Duke Enrico put his hand on his daughter’s shoulder. “Listen to Argrave.”
“His Majesty, Duke Enrico,” Orion corrected. “But please, tell us what happened to change our plans so.”
Argrave looked at him and took a deep breath, still grappling with that himself. “Another god has hit the forests. We have to change our response accordingly.”
“And the elven gods?” Vasilisa questioned seriously.
“…we’re lacking critical information,” Argrave said hesitantly. “There is much to work out. For now, go.”
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“Going back to the battlefield would be a clear uncooperative signal,” Anneliese advised Argrave. “And as we are now, we can do nothing. The fate of the elven gods rests in their own hands.”
Their party marched for the coastline. The two of them talked in a ward sustained by Anneliese, ensuring none of their conversation leaked out to anyone listening. They could tolerate no risks, not now.
As much as it embittered Argrave, he knew she had a point. Rushing back into things would achieve nothing but firmly placing them on one side of things. For now, regardless of how things played out, it was best to give the image of accepting Erlebnis’ unspoken offer. And so they headed for the ships Elenore sent, where some would turn back. Yet even still, Argrave’s mind drifted back to the battlefield…
“You saw the gods’ power,” Anneliese continued when Argrave said nothing. “Their enemies are strong, but as are they. And each are made even stronger by the power Kirel Qircassia’s partial defeat gave to them.”
He looked at her. “And if Erlebnis is lying about sparing the elves?”
“Could you change that fate?” Anneliese said tactfully. “Is there even a way out of this?”
Argrave heard her question and thought it rhetorical… yet nonetheless, his mind worked to grab at answers. “Mozzahr, the Castellan of the Empty, fought against gods deep below the earth in the abandoned cities of the dwarves. Racial dwarves, not like Artur,” Argrave told Anneliese. “Mozzahr fought the gods for a year. And in the end, he won.”
Anneliese looked at him. “You said he invades the mainland at the dawn of the third year.”
“He does,” Argrave nodded. “Down there, in those old, abandoned dwarven cities… well, precisely what’s happening here happened there. Gerechtigkeit saw Mozzahr as a threat to his victory, so he weakened the boundaries between realms, casting that place into chaos with the early advent of gods. And Mozzahr was the victor. That’s one hell of an achievement.”
Anneliese closed her eyes for a brief moment, then opened them again as she almost stumbled over something while walking. “I question why Gerechtigkeit refrained from something like that in Vasquer itself.”
“Maybe he thought I’d respond quickly enough to end it. Kirel had time to build up strength and widen the breach, hidden away in the Bloodwoods as he was. If not for him trying to kill the forest, I might not have noticed at all.” Argrave sighed. “Whatever the case, it doesn’t matter. This is what we deal with.”
“What lessons can we take from that?” Anneliese questioned. “Did the enemies Mozzahr face compare to Erlebnis at all?”
“Honestly, I’m grasping at straws a little,” Argrave paused, looking back to see everyone was following. Their haste had put some distance between him and the main forces, yet Orion still followed a comfortably close distance away. “Christ, this whole venture was straws to begin with… but now, it’s… I don’t know, half-eaten straws.”
“But you will grasp,” Anneliese said confidently. “At what, though?”
Argrave began quietly, “Do you remember when Onychinusa cast that spell on me, the first time we interacted with her?”
Anneliese blinked a few times, then nodded. “You said it was shamanic magic.”
Argrave nodded in confirmation and continued, “And I also said—”
“You also said that the Ebon Cult heralding Mozzahr were prominent users of shamanic magic,” she filled in somewhat eagerly. “And shamanic magic employs spirits, which are fragments of gods. Argrave, does this mean…?”
“Like I told you, I’m reaching,” Argrave cut in a little loudly, hoping to dampen her rising hope. It did not good to raise expectations. “Shamanic magic was useless to me in the beginning. Silvic was the only spirit we saw, and she wasn’t vulnerable to shamanic magic in the slightest. Spirits aren’t abundant. It’s been a thousand years since the last time gods could fragment, and most spirits have found their place far away from the clutches of mortals.”
“But now things are different,” Anneliese followed his train of thought. “Now, we have seen spirits, seen them taken in by the elven gods. But is it enough to turn the tide if we can get them, utilize them?”
Argrave didn’t answer her question. The rest of their force caught up, so Argrave resumed walking, and Anneliese followed eagerly waiting for his answer as he deliberated. “What Onychinusa was trying to do was teleport me to another location. That should give you some indication of how powerful shamanic magic can be. It also uses a highly limited resource that can’t reasonably be obtained until things get… very desperate. Any spirits we’d get, we’d have to make—namely, by the dismemberment of literal gods.”
“I hope that all of this is a preamble to ‘yes,’” Anneliese said hopefully.
“It depends on our ability, our luck, but… yes, I do see a way,” Argrave said quietly, as though to diminish the impact of his words by speaking them softly. “Did I ever mention what Mozzahr was actually fighting down there in the dwarven cities? He was fighting a god of war. Well, perhaps calling Sataistador ‘a’ god of war is doing him a disservice. Every god I can think of knows of him and fears him… meaning he’s either survived as many cycles or more cycles of judgement than any other god.” He looked at her. “That’s why the gods feared Mozzahr, too. You don’t kill an ancient god with luck alone.
“On that note…” Argrave slowed. “I want you to check me if I need checking, Anneliese. Am I making a mistake? Am I… letting pride, letting personal feelings, get in the way of things?” He looked to Orion beyond the ward. “I’m responsible for a lot more than myself, now. That’s what power is. Would it be best to swallow this defeat, bide my time, break these shackles?”
“Do you think Erlebnis will be entirely fair in his dealings?”
Argrave considered her question. “If he says he’ll do something, he’ll do it, I know that much. And if he wants you dead… well, we’re seeing that firsthand. He claimed to be our ‘our side,’ but Dimocles delivered that message… maybe there was a reason Erlebnis used a human messenger,” he shook his head in disappointment.
“Whatever the case, I am of the opinion it cannot be trusted,” Anneliese advised. “I think Dimocles is right. Erlebnis does know better than you, and if you fell under his wing Gerechtigkeit would surely perish. But the cost… we would be feeling it for generations. He would leave his cold, unfeeling mark on this entire continent. And all of his actions would be for his benefit.” She looked at him with a bitter smile. “If you want that… if you want safety for you, for us… as I said, I will follow you.”
“The easy out,” Argrave said. “Become his champion, save the world… and by the end of it all, leave an empty wasteland behind, exploited to nothingness in service of a higher power. You provide good clarity, you know.” He looked ahead, where the first bit of ocean came into sight. “Then we keep on like this. We can’t kill him, just like we can’t kill Kirel Qircassia. But maybe… maybe he can be repelled. Heh… to think I thought the Qircassian Coalition was my biggest looming enemy.”
“So—get shamanic magic, then return,” Anneliese nodded, seeming a little brighter with the light of hope. “Where might we get it?”
“Elenore was in charge of the teams exploring ruins to collect useful artifacts and knowledge. Nikoletta is going to check in with her, find out if the teams sent out have picked up anything worth using. If we’re lucky, we can rely upon that… but we’ll need a specific set of spells, so I’m not overflowing with optimism. If that falls through, I know a place we can enter. It’s tough… damn it all, it is very tough… but definitely not as tough as the emissaries.”
“It must be near,” Anneliese assumed. “Elsewise, how can we return fast enough to salvage this situation?”
He looked surprised she asked that question, then said with a smile, “How indeed?”
They passed beyond the trees onto the coastline as dusk finally ending, marking the beginning of night.
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I'm not satisfied with chapters 381-387. I hate letting people see underneath the hood, but I think it's best for the health of the story long-term that these chapters are overhauled.
The premise was to have Argrave run around the forest, waking up all the powers, making the situation more and more chaotic, making everyone more desperate... until Erlebnis comes in, as we've just seen.
The execution was... not that. I feel the whole thing with the centaurs was convoluted and messy, and judging by the analytics I think most would agree with that.
I'm going to rewrite them, focusing more on Argrave's efforts to deal with Erlebnis. This will focus the scope on the real central conflict, and give more time to develop new characters introduced as their motives and interests are brought to light as their loyalty is questioned. These rewrites will likely go on Royal Road.
Comments
Whole chapters lately have seemed like power creep. It's a problem a lot of authors deal with but I feel like all of this is due to everything feeling a bit rushed? Forced to fight gods is tough. Heck I would say that anything with God like powers is the absolute bottom of a barrel worst. We mortals have no reference for it. You write a story about a guy stealing a horse twice. Thats clever. Readers can tell you it's a good story. Some God does some God things? Idk. You need a lot of power to fight that. Argave has been more of a Batman in the story. He kinda prepares a plan and executes. Right now he is just reacting to everything, so while he is still driving the story it feels like his agency is diminished. He is using others to borrow god power. Chaos never makes good reading, so using it as a weapon is not great. I think your on the path to fixing it but I agree the last chapters have felt off.
Desurtfawks
2023-06-05 13:05:19 +0000 UTCI'm not sure that argrave should be more focused on dealing with erl-god of knowledge, cuz I think it's better if it catches him off guard and gives him a reminder not to get cocky or complacent. Plus it's always more interesting when antagonists make smart plans and react accordingly to achieve their own goals, beyond the scope of what an MC does. But I do think the centaurs and giants and all the maneuvering he did, without any real impact on the Elven gods walking out of some trees and fucking that other god's day up, is sorta superfluous. But also, no one wants a previously unseen guy showing up and ruining argraves plans, so somehow you gotta lightly foreshadow that erl is in play, without making him enough of a threat to force Argrave to focus on him. Also not quite sure what the take away from Artur acting sketchy when he got the letter was supposed to be.
Gardor
2023-06-04 08:44:35 +0000 UTCYou're the driver. We're here to enjoy the ride.
ReadingObsessed
2023-06-02 13:00:20 +0000 UTCLike his credibility would probably go up after what they saw agrave do but I doubt it would've been to the extent where people back probably have a huge emphasis on tradition and hierarchy would look at a social outcast for leadership
Isiah Debarros
2023-06-02 10:54:21 +0000 UTCI like most of it I think that the rewrites are probably for the best. The situation with the centaur seemed kind of unrealistic. The idea that one exile that came back would be able to have so much authority in a tribal society was weird to me like they would make more sense if we found out that he used to be a chief or something but we never did. Like it was so bad that they went to him instead of their real leaders
Isiah Debarros
2023-06-02 10:52:34 +0000 UTCPersonally I think chapters 381-387 were great at building up hype and chaos, I honestly don’t have any criticism I could come up with for them, what I had a problem with was the conclusion. I thought, from a meta perspective, that the reason you sent Galamon and Durran away was because Argave’s forces were due to be massacred. I thought there was a lot of foreshadowing done to highlight Very Bad Things Will Happen and after bracing for impact for the last few chapters it turns out Argave’s “allies” who he met 5 minutes ago and hated him anyway are now getting slaughtered and we should all feel very sad about it. It honestly felt like a huge let down. It all happened off screen too. And the elven gods just let him walk away with not even a word despite having him completely in their power – neither Argrave nor Annelise seemed to even consider that the elves could betray them and there was absolutely nothing they could do about it. The whole transition at the end of chapter 387 and straight into Dimocles felt way too abrupt. Honestly the more I think about the conclusion the worse it seems. Oh also if you are re-writing can I please get more info into how Argraves new bloodshadows work. He has been spending magic like its air recently, is it because he recharges shadows way faster than he does normal magic or because he made literally hundreds of blood shadows in chitengs realm ? If it’s the latter how does he plan to recharge shadows if he doesn’t have access to a magical health realm ?
Hypnotical
2023-06-02 10:51:26 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! Glad there will be a rewrite. Those chapters did feel a lot messier than the rest of the story as far as I was concerned!
Gopard
2023-06-02 08:47:27 +0000 UTCYeah, I agree. The centaur "ark" really felt kind of "slapped on" because it's "convenient" not actually narratively sound. It seemed really strange to me both that a single random individual (Matesh) could whip the entire race in such an unthinking frenzy AND that it would be more "effective" to have a huge force actually among for Argrave put into battlefield and "conveniently" having a net positive impact by fighting the coalitions forces... The general idea is Very nice it's also in tune both with Argrave's "humane tendency" and his habit of creating as "convolute and complicated a plan as possible to still have everything work out somehow". But it felt to light on the actual details to really make it seem like something "realistic" and not something that just "works because MCs plan" ;)
Gopard
2023-06-02 08:45:55 +0000 UTCI agree. I think the scope of what I wanted to do was impossible with the fast pace I like to keep the story at. Too many pit-stops, too many different factions. Erlebnis is definitely the more interesting conflict, so I'm going to narrow down on that.
Nemorosus
2023-06-02 07:27:10 +0000 UTCThe rewrites are definitely for the best. This whole arc felt a bit aimless and lacking in narrative focus. And approaching it in another way will hopefully bring it to the quality the rest of the story has. Looking forward to it.
Mad Max
2023-06-02 07:11:15 +0000 UTC