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Laura's Inner Preacher

I got some feedback from a couple of readers (it means a lot when two of you agree on something) that I overdid the "preacher voice" inside Laura's head.  Especially with the bolded text and the repetitive nature of his imprecations.

In the future, I'll clean that up, although this voice in her head doesn't show up in 16, I have to be careful to get her inner demons out where we can see them without letting it tangle up the whole story.



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