Constant in All Other Things 3: Chapter 3
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There, typos fixed. "hisses and coy words" was the correction, and though "pouncing beats" would indeed be a lot of fun - sadly, you're right, it was "pounding" beats. And agian, thanks for spotting these - so helpful.
David Sanders
2024-06-30 17:36:47 +0000 UTCI'm glad you enjoyed the chapter - and thank you very much for both the kind words, and feedback! I can't tell you how helpful typo-spotting is; I try to catch them all, but a few always seem to slip through.
David Sanders
2024-06-28 20:57:58 +0000 UTCNonpareil. Everything I'd hoped for from this encounter. I was wondering if Julia would out him as a man as part of her campaign to humiliate David, but the climax is perfect as is. I hope this isn't too bold, but a few typos: "he knocked the ball out of the part" --- part = park? "her earring classy" -- earring = earrings (she's wearing two) " it wasn’t exactly pouncing clubland beats." -- pouncing == pounding (or maybe I'm not going to the right clubs :) ) "And do as your told." -- you're = you're " It was delicious but I only dimly noticed as watched." -- should this be 'as I watched'? "hisses and cy words" -- should that be 'icy words'
Christine
2024-06-28 20:22:28 +0000 UTCFeel free to let me know what you think! Does it hold together as a chapter? Does it meet expectations, or does it disappoint? Feedback always appreciated. I'm worried that it goes a little too far with the eroticism - any thoughts?
David Sanders
2024-06-28 18:41:22 +0000 UTC
