Magic Notebook 6 Progress
Added 2024-08-21 16:51:11 +0000 UTCThis is not the completed Chapter 6, but I wanted to upload to give you the chance to see how things are changing.
What I have now is, give or take, the 4th or 5th version of Chapter 6. I tried different approaches to Sophia's personality as I went, which changed the shape of the story considerably.
I've included 2 of the other versions (the ones that were complete enough to be comprehensible) just so you could compare and contrast with the newer version. I may go and cherry pick pieces of the other drafts for the final version, so don't be surprised if some of the phrases and dialogue make it through into the final version.
I also made Sophia a strawberry blonde, because I think that fits with the 'girl-next-door-turned-slut' vibe that I want to be the core of her.
Comments
Looking forward to seeing the official path.
John Henry
2024-08-29 21:56:10 +0000 UTCVery timely question! I was out of town for work for several days, which I'd hoped to use to get some writing in but wound up busier than I expected. On the plus side, though, the drive to and from the event left me with lots of time to think, and I was able to make some good progress planning in my head. I'm working on finishing out the chapter now, and will probably have it done some time tonight - look for a further update soon!
Winston Tarbox
2024-08-29 21:14:18 +0000 UTCHow is the chapter going?
John Henry
2024-08-29 19:20:01 +0000 UTCAlso wanted to say liked the getting to the apartment and FF is following Dan for the couch on knees and he did not even realize, combined that with the way girls reacted to her v way he did to the girls walking in in the one where he was getting a BJ is a great juxtaposition showing how he's is dealing with having slaves v how the slaves are reacting. And Ashley having to take a more commanding role was really nice
John Henry
2024-08-21 21:30:26 +0000 UTCHah, I caught myself typing Rex, not surprised one slipped through. I may see about some of FFs sisters showing up later, but I don't currently intend to have them be a major part of anything
Winston Tarbox
2024-08-21 21:20:42 +0000 UTCAll very different stories, FYI you did say Rex in one of them. Interested to see the path you choose. Are you going to close off the group meeting FF's former sister slaves / I assume they are like her and still slaves under everything so what happens with them. If one is in an institution I cannot see Dan not trying to help... looking forward to seeing what you do with it
John Henry
2024-08-21 21:17:16 +0000 UTC
