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3.05 Father and Son (Apprentice+ Access)

The first draft of chapter 5 of Book 3 of A New Player.

It deals with events at the end of the previous chapter, seeing events unfold through the eyes of Cam and Anakin.

As always with draft chapters, comments and ideas are welcome here or on Discord. Also, do note that spotting grammar/spelling mistakes isn't necessary.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1E8NFTWkO7GX0TTlWkhpSbNOHMLETTq-aOxP2uzp-gZU/edit?usp=sharing

Comments

I wouldn't say that. The twins made an earlier offer to Cam, which he turned down at the time as he was with Serra. While he still cares deeply for her, that's not the case now, and what man would turn down Zeltron twins?

USSExplorer

In the chapter they get a transmission in hyperspace. In canon, that is impossible, at least in the until the clone wars. What do you acknowledge? Was that a conscious descision?

Tsorov

Good chapter, coming along nicely. It does look like Cam is like certain sailors with a woman at every port.

Monkeywrench


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