Unexpected Additions (Lord's Access)
Added 2024-03-20 12:00:04 +0000 UTCRedraft of this month's Game of Kingdoms chapter.
As always, comments, mistake spotting and ideas are more than welcome on the GDoc or on Discord. (To see future chapters even earlier, and if you can, consider joining the Discord server linked to Patreon. There, Lord-Master's have a private channel where I drop the chapters a few days earlier.)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Cr2PKKWmCq-8cQZVURqtERpJ3wrIWlchgmiGDiBFHlk/edit?usp=sharing
Comments
I like this redraft. Particularly Cregans interactions with Yara and his family. Also, prince Doran’s POV feels better fleshed out. I’m a bit disappointed in how alysane is seemingly reciprocating Daemons affections. I’m liking him less and less and part of me feels like she is interested in him because she wants to retaliate for Cregan alienating her.
Austin lloyd
2024-03-22 03:40:08 +0000 UTC
