[Insider] Where is CH24 of Toxic!!?
Added 2024-11-19 17:07:47 +0000 UTCHey everyone, you probably saw a notification that Chapter 24 of Toxic Attraction was published. But now, if you look for it - it's not here. Well, it looks like some of the content was a little too spicy, and it got taken down.
I've edited out some of the areas I think were an issue and resubmitted it for approval. It says it'll take a few days before it's reviewed and reappears here.
That being said, I don't like being behind my delivery dates with you guys. If you use your patreon login, I've put up the story on my website. The link is below.
If there is an issue logging in or you don't want to do that, leave me a comment below and I'll reach out.
Comments
Any ideas on when the final version will be released and likely changes?
Bob James
2024-11-27 10:23:46 +0000 UTCAdding to my previous point, I think it would be hot if before Jesse fucked Sarah She asked Lester for PERMISSION to suck jesse and get his cock wet for her pussy. Playing into the idea that she is being a slut just for lester, I think it would be hot to call back to when Lester said that she looks good with a cock in her mouth. (“Remember how you told me I look good with a cock in my mouth daddy? I want to show you again, can i suck this thick cock for you?”) I think it would be hot if Lester coaxed Sarah into humiliating Dan while he was fucking her and she was blindfolded adding to her arousal (“tell your husband and our guest how my cock is the best cock you ever had”)
ojapa O
2024-11-23 01:36:43 +0000 UTCWhy did it take Lester so long to figure out Sarah was on birth control pills? He had access to her private info since chapter 14. I assume the small pill bottle contained placebos he was going to replace. The public engagement scene was fantastic. Bravo Don well played and written. But you missed taking advantage of it afterwards Sarah is falling hard for Lester so Lester could have played up their engagement like he did in the “marriage” scene in chapter 14. Have Sarah repeat the words “I love you” to Lester as well as some pregnancy talk. However Dan is lost in so many ways. First, how will hidden spy cams work against Lester who probably already has his own surveillance cameras to eye Dan. Like sending a package to his work, oh that will work Duh! He is absolutely clueless. Second, Sarah needs to cheering up and try to reconnect but he poopoos her idea for a date and doesn’t take her on a spontaneous date. Sure Dan is pragmatic but he is losing her by being a stick in the mud. Lester represents fun, excitement and now intimacy to Sarah. I can’t wait to read the upcoming confrontation between Sarah and Dan once he gets released from jail. I doubt the conversation will turn out well for Dan
Charlie_Chuckles
2024-11-22 04:27:34 +0000 UTCI loved how when she realized Dan wasn’t there she continued to allow herself to be fucked like the slut she is. Her downfall from innocent mother of 2 to dirty street whore is immaculate
KB
2024-11-21 19:49:12 +0000 UTCWhere is Neighbor Encounters final modified enriched version Don ??😅
Jorge1717
2024-11-21 15:44:50 +0000 UTCYes, most likely Lester will somehow explain Dan’s absence to Sarah and continue to fuck her in ch.25, and in ch.26 he will persuade her to go with him to Middleton, as he suggested at the beginning of this chapter.
Daniel
2024-11-21 13:51:45 +0000 UTCI agree about hearing Sarah's thoughts about Jesse. Yes, pleasing Lester, but how did she feel knowing she was kind of being a 'traitor' to Dan? Even in her lust, that must have flashed through her mind. We only ever hear her thoughts about Lester (or the hospital), never Dan. I'm assuming that CH. 25 is going to be about the Saturday/Sunday in Chicago, then CH. 26 will probably be back in Middleton?
MV
2024-11-21 10:41:17 +0000 UTCI like that idea too. I want to see her being used by multiple men as Lester sees fit
KB
2024-11-21 00:31:40 +0000 UTCI was really hoping for a final scene with just Sarah and lester. Where more (any?) of the engagement roll-play could occur.
YouTensil
2024-11-21 00:15:07 +0000 UTC(Also posted to discord ) Thoughts on 24: The first half was very solid, with lots of intresting exposition. Lester's plan was maybe a little convoluted, but he does have a track record there! Things felt maybe a little rushed, like we need to hit point a and b in this chapter, in order to be at point c for 25. Especially Lester reconnecting with Jesse. I think it would have been more grounded happening over two chapters. But, i get the desire to move things along. Just hope you don't feel rushed in completing this series. The build up to the date was really great. The sex scene was, in many was, excellent. Lester establishing dominance, then Jesse following. When she removed the blindfold i think more could have been done to establish exactly why she carried on. Obviously, she was in super sexual mode, but was this a test of loyalty and devotion to Lester (my feeling is yes, but that wasn’t very clear). Was it because Dan hates Jesse? Lester asking more prying questions would have been hot. More of him verbally owning her and her sexuality (with her responding) would amp up the scene (for me). Then we get to the end, which was the bit I had the biggest problems with. The first issue was maybe Dan's awakening could have been better mixed with the sex scene (cutting back and forth through to the end)? This would have kept the sexual tension up and delivered the big reveal. The second issue i had was maybe the big reveal was, well too big? Especially for a very drunk/drugged man. I was expecting more of a kernel of awakening, rather than a complete one. As someone else said, "drunk Dan apparently becomes sherlock Holmes". I was expecting something closer to a "Lester IS the bad rabbit", kind of thing. Have him shout it out (then told off). Something that sounds a little mad, but is actually true. Something he could then later use to fit the other pieces in place? And lastly, we come to my biggest issue. Which I have to be completely up front about might entirely be my own fault (but I wonder if others might feel the same). In 23 Lester said the date would be in a hotel, there would by a third person, then it would just be the two of them. I liked that idea. In know in 24 Lester kind of says we're doing it differently, but how differently is open to interpretation. So the expectation that there would be another scene with just Sarah and Lester was already there. THEN!!! You add in the engagement angle, and i was SUPER pumped for it! This was going to be incredible!!! But no, we had a fade to black on the sex scene and then a bit more (admittedly important) exposition. Overall, I think more could have been done in the hotel room with the engagement angle (get Jesse to congratulate, The future Mrs Marshall, etc.). But, alas, it was a case of Chekhov's engagement ring (obviously it might have more to play in 23, but even so, the engagement dynamic was underplayed). I'm really not expecting Don to write another whole scene just for me. But, honestly I feel that would have been the most satisfying and natural conclusion to the chapter. So, overall, very solid, intresting chapter that makes me want to read part 25. But, i think I expected more at the end than there was, which somehow undercut what was a very good sex scene.
YouTensil
2024-11-21 00:13:25 +0000 UTCThe scene definitely needs to be finished for sure. Can’t end there no way
KB
2024-11-20 23:02:51 +0000 UTCYeah good point Oj.
Royston smith
2024-11-20 21:59:33 +0000 UTCAgreed. If there is to be a split between the couple (temporary, hopefully), I can see Dan instigating it. Lester will think he's won, but without Dan in her world as her dependable anchor, is she suddenly going to feel lost, drifting in a world with nothing but sex? Will she then start to realise that spending her life with Lester is different from edgy sex with him in front of hubby?
MV
2024-11-20 20:14:40 +0000 UTCSara's thoughts in the last chapter reveal she gets off on two guys , Dan and Lester fighting over her ( as we all know) and that she thinks she is totally in control of both men. She counts on Dan being a prisoner to his fantasy, or was and is breaking free to see the situation as it is, and she thinks Lester is being controlled when she denies him. Talk about being delusional! An addict convincing themself that they control their addiction. I like Sara better as The equal participant, not the wanton fuck doll with no rational thought, but it does go with the storyline and I hope she reaches bottom soon!
Fuzzy Shark
2024-11-20 18:45:48 +0000 UTCI can certainly see her having to lie/make excuses more (looking on the surface to Dan that she's taking Lester's side).
MV
2024-11-20 18:32:35 +0000 UTCI think it would be interesting to read a bit of Jesse’s POV when Lester is fucking Sarah, since Jesse has obviously had a huge crush on her, it would be hot to read about him seeing her getting treat like a slut by this random ugly dude
ojapa O
2024-11-20 09:01:02 +0000 UTCFrom this point on, Lester has to act really very assertively to offset the potential damage to himself from Dan, who may reveal the truth about everything to Sarah. Like blackmailing Dan, keeping Sarah away from her husband under constant sexual pressure - constantly raising the stakes, it should be pretty hot.
Daniel
2024-11-20 08:29:22 +0000 UTCI have two scenarios going forward, Dan will tell Sarah what he suspects about Lester and they will continue as normal while bringing him down, or he will not trust Sarah to keep this from her lover. He by chance meets up with Lizzy and they confide in each other and formulate a plan to bring him down with his FBI Clint’s in Washington. The conclusion being to blackmail Lester and Sarah because she has betrayed him. He will tell her that she will be seen as an accomplice in the hostpital software virus. Dan and Lizzy will fuck in front of Lester and Sarah then he will tell Lester he can have her “ I don’t want her any more” and he’s taking the girls from her. I she fights the divorce she will end up in jail. Sarah is heartbroken and regrets ever finding the apartment with Lester because she has foolishly lost everything and realises she will never love Lester.
Mel
2024-11-20 08:09:01 +0000 UTCI think Patreon was questioning Lester’s last words to Sarah, “Time for Round 2. You are going to be busy all night.” Sarah is depicted as being completely spent and exhausted. Lester’s words could be viewed as sinister and future actions considered non-consensual. The edits will be interesting.
J Lewis
2024-11-20 04:30:34 +0000 UTCQuite frankly one of my favorite. Just because I enjoy how dark it’s getting. How much lower will she allow herself to go. I love the idea of her ruining her personal life just to see Lester. Risking it all
KB
2024-11-19 23:00:20 +0000 UTCYes, the chapter was excellent. Lester’s machinations masterful as usual. The sex scene really well written . None of the formulaic writing by numbers of DL. Nice to be vindicated on it being Jesse. Glad he finally got to realise his dream. The penny has dropped with Dan at last. But maybe too late. Not sure what they can hold him for besides being drunk and disorderly though. Agree with Fuzzy though, if Dan gets out how will Lester manage the situation ?He will have a lot of questions to answer. However, Don’s throwaway line about adding/expanding scenes may mean he provides some answers to those questions. Surely the final scene cant end as it is currently. Lester must fuck her again/fuck her all night. Also , a sex scene at the beginning with Lester fucking her in his new hospital office would be good.
Royston smith
2024-11-19 22:48:04 +0000 UTCLots of questions going forward... how does Lester explain things to Sara when she asks or is Sara so far gone she doesn't care?
Fuzzy Shark
2024-11-19 22:28:26 +0000 UTCI want to see this situation affect her personal life more. Like causing drift between parents or friends or something.
KB
2024-11-19 21:29:33 +0000 UTCI like the direction. I wish you finished the scene and built up for a new look going forward. I would love seeing her be completely broken and debased her level. I want more older and uglier men getting turns and her lying to Dan to go and do these things with Lester
KB
2024-11-19 21:09:00 +0000 UTCSara is gone and going forward only see her making excuses for Lester when Dan confronts her about what happened. Heart broken for Dan .
Fuzzy Shark
2024-11-19 21:05:37 +0000 UTCHotel room scenario, satiation, lubrication nice sequel to new young/old small dick stranger invited in by Lester to do initial anal, prepping for his big damaging one - her ass/ walk never the same
WILLYBOY
2024-11-19 20:00:53 +0000 UTCTo be clear really enjoy the story overall and the first of it's class of this genre.
Bob James
2024-11-19 19:56:59 +0000 UTCI have some ideas for the edited version.
DonSilver
2024-11-19 19:32:29 +0000 UTCI think I have an idea of what triggered it. I'll keep an eye out in the future. My website is a good backup if this happens again.
DonSilver
2024-11-19 19:32:04 +0000 UTCSent you a message.
DonSilver
2024-11-19 19:31:20 +0000 UTCSorry the refresh link. Then it lets you in.
Royston smith
2024-11-19 19:25:35 +0000 UTCRob you just need to click on the allow link.
Royston smith
2024-11-19 19:24:37 +0000 UTCStories okay. It's missing...something. not sure what. Very well written though. Maybe another scene or perhaps more biting dialogue?
Bob James
2024-11-19 18:49:53 +0000 UTCNow I’m worried that all chapters might be taken down by Patreon
Proginor
2024-11-19 18:32:59 +0000 UTCThis link always takes me to the Patreon paywall even though I’m a top tier member. Can you please send the PDF version instead?
Robert Smith
2024-11-19 17:58:19 +0000 UTC
